48 Chapter 48: Training hard for 3 minutes and showing great improvements.
"Huh, Orochimaru convinced Sasuke to leave Konoha?" Oden said in confusion.
"Yes, he left two early in the morning yesterday, and today I sent a few genin under Shikamaru to bring him back," Tsunade explained her conundrum.
"I see..." Oden said as he thought back.
He believed that it would be enough for Itachi to leave hints about the Uchiha Massacre, but it was not enough, Sasuke still deserted.
And this all happened while he was away...
"it seems like he is becoming a bigger annoyance than necessary, it's soon time to erase one of the three sannin," Odin said lightly.
Everyone turned toward him in surprise but then remembered what he had done in Kumo.
"Then will you follow Sasuke to find Orochimaru?" Tsunade asked.
"No, let's use him to sharpen little Sasuke... I still think there is good within him." Oden gave his opinion.
After discussing important matters, Oden finally brought up a matter he had wanted to speak about with Tsunade for a while.
"Why don't you take on more disciples?/We do need good medics and more powerful Kunoichi," Oden said.
"It's not that easy, it's hard to find shinobi with the talent necessary to become a medic," Tsunade said with a sigh, she had wanted to train more medics, but sadly, a medic is not easy to become so it's hard to find people with potential.
"I know of three who might have the talent. My wife Hinata, Sakura from team Kakashi, and Ayako Sarutobi." Oden informed before leaving.
when he arrived at his mansion he called for Hinata.
She hurried toward him and hugged him.
"Welcome back... H-husband-kun!">She said with a blush.
"I'm back... But it's time for you to show me the jutsu you've been working on!" Oden said. He was curious about what his wife had created.
as they stepped outside Hinata started churning out chakra through her palms, soon blue flames of chakra took form and then started forming into two heads of lions.
Oden was very impressed with the fact that Hinata had created her jutsu. He knew that she would create this jutsu later on when her talent is really shown, but it seems like His presence in her life had helped her bloom.
Hinata started making Katas with her palms that had big blue lion heads of chakra on them.
Oden noticed that although she had finished the jutsu, she hadn't mastered it as the lion heads sometimes flickered.
when she was done she sat down on the ground breathing heavily, as she caught her breath she turned her innocent, pretty white eyes toward Oden, looking at him like a puppy waiting to get a compliment or a treat.
"Well done Hinata, I'm very impressed!" Oden said with a nod.
She brightened up and gave him a heartfelt smile.
"Thank you Oden-Kun." she said.
"What's the technique called and how did you come up with it?" Oden asked showing interest in her.
"It's called the Gentle step, twin lion fists... and I came up with it after you taught me the SasuHari. By releasing chakra through the whole of my hands and with great chakra control I created this technique." She said slightly embarrassed.
"It's brilliant, if you master it, you might be able to throw the lion fists at your enemies from afar." Oden said.
The Oden turned and walked further from Hinata as she was resting.
He took out a certain scroll he had gotten from Kumo, and then read through it.
Hinata just saw Oden take out a scroll and read it, she noticed that his brows went down now and then while reading.
Hinata just stared at him in his concentration and about 4 minutes later she saw him infuse fire chakra into his hand holding the scroll, burning it up.
"Eh, weren't you learning a new technique, did it not fit your style, why did you burn the scroll?" She asked in surprise, she had noticed that the scroll seemed to hold some jutsu in it, as jutsu scrolls are somewhat unique looking.
"What use is a scroll when I've already learned the Jutsu?" Oden asked as if she was asking a dumb question.
Hinata's head turned to the side, like a confused puppy.
'Even if it is an E-rank jutsu, it would take a lot of reading and practicing to learn the jutsu, but Oden-kun learned it by just reading it for a few minutes?' Hinata thought.
Suddenly Mina stepped out of the shadows, seeing Hinata's facial expression she understood what she was thinking.
"Young lady, don't worry, you'll understand soon, what kind of freak your husband is." Mina said.
Hinata didn't show a reaction as she had gotten used to Mina appearing and disappearing every now and then.
'To learn an E-rank jutsu that fast... I've never heard of it!' Hinata thought in surprise at Mina's words.
Suddenly a heavy, blue chakra started to form around Oden's whole body, but it only lasted for a few seconds before it faded. Oden looked down with his brows furrowed. Then after two seconds of thinking he tried it again.
Soon the chakra started forming again and this time way stronger, with big sparks and electric charges coming out of him.
Hinata's jaw dropped, this didn't look like a normal E-rank jutsu, no, rather it looked like the description of the famed Lightning release chakra mode of The Raikage... yet Hinata couldn't believe it.
Oden felt the whole world slow down, he felt his reaction speed become much, much greater, and his body became stronger and faster to an unimaginable state.
Hinata just saw Oden disappear from where he stood.
Oden had appeared above the Hokage monument, He was so fast that it almost felt like he was teleporting using his eye power.
'This Technique is great, but the chakra it consumes is as great.' Oden thought.
The Raikage was one of the few that had chakra comparable to that of a chakra beast, and could use this technique for a long while. However, if a normal Kage used the same technique, they might not last 10 minutes with it.
That's how great the chakra consumption is, a perfect technique for Oden.
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So next release will be in a bundle of 3 or 4 chapters. I don't know how many days but maybe 3-4 at most?
Also, could you guys leave reviews if you like this? I've received like 4 reviews with a 1-2 star rating which doesnt make sense at all. And im going to unload s bit of my frustration on you guys, bear with me for a bit.
The star rating system is built upon 5 categories, The writing quality, The updating stability, Story development, Character design and the world background.
The writing quality of this fanfic is pretty good, sure I write lots of spelling errors (Because I write on my phone and when Im in my flow I don't stop to correct) But the grammar it pretty hogh quality compared to most fanfics if I can say so myself.
This should be about 3-4 stars, Am I wrong in this?
The updating stability, So far has been great. I've released 2 chapters (2k-3k words) everyday since the release date with some bonus chapters. This is better than 99% of all fanfics. This should definitely be 4-5 stars.
Story development, here's where the subjective oponion is what matters, If you hated my fanfic and didnt like a single thing about the story, this is where you put a 1 star.
Character design, This is also subjective, as you might like my characters or not. But overall, both on this fanfic and my former, most of the readers (99%) loved my OC characters, my portrayal of Canon characters and their interaction. Take the grandpa for example, I only received good comments on him. Yet I would only put 4 stars on thai category because I k ow the MC isnt to everyones liking. I wrote him with a chinese young master in mind. But there is some differences, for example, for you guys that are keen, observant and attentive, you might have noticed ghat there is almost always a reason for mc's act of arrogance.
He does it to either keep an image, to stimulate growth in others, or to challenge other people. I did this intentionally so I understand if you wouldnt want to give this category a 5 star. But it should be somewhere between 4-5 stars with how I wrote most my characters, right?
World building, This is the beloved Naruto world, its going to be greeat even if I fail at portraying it vividly. But I think I did a good job of creating a good image of the fights, people, cities. This should at the lowest be a 2 star right?
So overall, even if you hated my fanfic it should still have a 2.5-3 stars, am I wrong in this?
The proof for what Ive said so far is in the fact that If you look at my reviews, almost all gave it a 4-5 stars, only 3-5 gave it a 2 star.
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