Reviews of N°1: The Saga of the Emptiness Harbinger: The Beginning(old version)

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I am having a really hard time trying to understand what the hell is going on in the story, I think that I might drop it for a while. It's not because of the story but because of my inability to understand it.

This cultivating couch potato hath cometh here for the slaughter promised by the author, Theo. Truly a man of culture. Adding this to my Library.

This Bear brings Doom to everyone and everything it doesn't like. I like this so may the stars bless you. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

a pretty interesting read so far. looking forward to more chapters afterend of hiatus :) thanks :) and now i have to fill 140 characters...

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Note: I give 5/5 stars regardless of my scoring below. Also, the story only has 4 chapters at the time of this review, so it's really too early to properly judge it. Keep in mind the score could change a lot (for better or worse) as more chapters are added. Writing Quality: 3.5/5. It's clear the author speaks English, but I'm guessing it's their 2nd language. It's good enough that readers should have no problem understanding what's happening. It's just that some sentences read a bit oddly and minor grammar mistakes are common. Updates: 2/5. Looks like two updates per month so far. Story: 4/5. Original story that's fairly interesting. It has a lot of potential depending on how things play out. Minus one point because the MC (Shorty) is just kind of going with the flow for now. But really, it's too early to judge accurately. This could easily be bumped up to 5/5 after a few more chapters. Character Design. 4/5. The characters are interesting and engaging. Their appearances could be described in more detail. World Background. 5/5. It's clear the author has put a lot of effort planning the world/universe before writing, and that effort shows very early on in the work.

Overall I really enjoy the writing style of this author, it being first person really hits home to me! The way he pulls you into the MC and leaves mystery in the first chapter gets high praise from me . Looking forward to new chapters once you've outlined this well!

Not bad but more action is needed. Hasn't got many descriptions either. But it is quite interesting.

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