Scarlettbunny
Hello! This is my second novel, my first being Hinder-Rella. I am going with a darker tone to this one. More of an adventure/romance/comedy/not meant for pure minds that will easily be corrupted by my words and can never look at the world same way kinda feel. Any who I am warning you know, there is only one chapter and it jumped right into a bad place the happy go lucky then bad again. So be warned this is almost nothing like Hinder-Rella unless you read the murder scene or toture scene or parental abuse scene. Cause it's kinda like that but maybe worse haven't decided but here you go. My way to you. Happy reading!
When reviewing, I always give each category one extra star to the score. Except for newbie writers, who receive two stars. Writing Quality 4: Writing has very little grammar mistakes, such as swapping "you're" for "your", but again, these are very rare. Beyond that, there are some awkward sentences. Not that they're wrong, just that it doesn't feel like what a person would say, such as, "What is your level of skill in the kitchen?" or "Stop it! You are confusing enough! My heart can't take any more cuteness!" And finally, I would recommend breaking down some of the paragraphs, so that they don't become blocks of text. Especially when there are two speakers in the same paragraph. Stability of Updates 5: Personally, I don't like this category, as sometimes the writer needs more time to finish up a chapter, but may end up sacrificing the quality to keep the release rate, so I always give it a 5. Story Development 4: Story flows well enough, and it manages to hold the reader's attention, despite some of the events sounding a bit far fetched, such as how MC tricks the brothel owner at the beginning. Character Design 5: Characters are quite distinct from one another and interesting. World Background 3: This category could be improved, in hopes to paint a better picture of the environment in the reader's mind. Better doesn't mean a nicer picture, but one that the reader can more clearly understand. Review score (4+5+4+5+3)/5 = 4.2 Score given = (5+5+5+5+4)/5 = 4.8
This story is truly a hidden gem amongst many other stories. It will capture the readers hearts and emotions chapter after chapter. It is a beautiful and yet terrifying at times story of a young women/girl as it follows her through her transmigration to her new world and family. The world is full of magic and her adoptive mother loves her dearly. The chaos brought into her life never seems to end as those wanting her for there own selfish goals are relentless. Truly a must read and a hidden gem as the story progresses:) Thank you for such a heart grabbing story :)
I truly amazing journey of a young girl going through trials and tribulations. From tears to joy and fear to terror and then calm. Ariana is an amazing young girl on her way to becoming a young women. She meets the nastiest and nicest people along the way. Her journey is incredible and powerful and will move the reader through tears and joy as well :) Thank you for such a great story and please keep it going :)
This story can take your emotions any direction at any time. One never truly knows just what might happen next. Ariana is a beautiful young girl with the soul of a young women from another time and world. In this world she is chased by a dark corrupt church and the corrupt council. All she has are her adopted family and her friends. She has power within her but it needs time to grow and mature. Who will win and at what cost. Thank you so much for the great story so far and please keep updating it :)
This story started out very dark for me in the first chapters but it has gained my support and interest. The story has a strong FL who is young and vibrant, she has lots of character and loves her friends and family. They are her reverse dragon scale. She has to protect them as they have to protect her from an evil organization and religion. The story covers every emotion one has. Please keep on writing and look forward to seeing many more chapters. Thank you. :)
I found the premise interesting and the story also flows smoothly. Characters themselves are varied and keeps things interesting. However the narration and the paragraph structure need some work as I am oftentimes left confused as to who the speaker is or what exactly is happening. But I am only in the first half of the story and there is still a lot to read and it is just my initial opinion of what I have read so far…
Starting with the title it presents a romance tale which is contrary to the plotline inside. The main lead has demons to protect and aid her in the plans. Stating the world background it's a detailed imagery to narrate the story. Though the second chapter was a bit ambiguous to understand what was actually happening. In a nut shell the narration is a new thing to read when everyone is following the trends this narration is something unique and productive. With all elements blended though certain grammatical errors are there needed to be corrected, but it's readable. ❤