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It came to my attention that there are some experts in literature among readers. their unbiased accurate and expert evaluation which is mostly negative is responsible for the one week hiatus around chapter 21. If any of those experts have their own works under their belts I would like to compare their level to this work. I would like to know how many of people are familiar with the term "constructive criticism". If you want to badmouth someones work do it in proper way like civilised and educated people. --- Now after the rant let's go to the Review... I give 5/5. Oh you are asking why and on what basis? I just have to say that I tried the style of the people I made my rant about :D
I had finish reading this and I have to say that I'm truly have a low standard in evaluating these fanfic because I know taht sot of them are writing for fun and game... The reason why I said what I say is that this is more like narration and wish fulfillment fanfic... Kind of like "I want this, so I get it. Fvck the world logic. " . So if you want a light heart, bad grammar yet wish fulfillment "Author logic fvck the canon logic silly" fanfic, this is for you.. I in the meanwhile, shall stop here.. The author had hiatus anyway.. No hope.
Ginny is a year younger than Harry, you can defend all you want but sexualizing Hogwarts students below 5th yr will always be disturbing. It's a funny read if that's what you're aiming for, but give life to other characters, paranoid Dumbledore just goes okay with all you want, the girls all easily accept their situation. This is HP in easy mode you can do anything you want and other can only react, they can't even touch you...
i don't know english, i'm writing with google translator. 1: wish fulfillment story, it doesn't bother me. for me the whole story is like that at some level. what pisses me off is the amount of BS. 2: the MC has no depth, wants to act smart but looks like a donkey who makes decisions on impulse that only work because of BS. 3: the MC looks like a maniac and a cartoon villain who only wins because of BS. seriously, he manipulates 7 year old girls. 4:11 who looks like a teenager? WTF? the magic in Harry Potter never showed it and never hinted that it could do this naturally. 5: every time the MC is going to do a scene I am ashamed of his thoughts, he is a child but do adults still take him seriously? i know that hp wizards are not the knife more sharp but be serious. 6: do girls listen to him instead of their parents? WTF? hard to believe. look, I don't know if this was a constructive criticism, I don't want to offend the author, I'm just giving my opinion. compared to other fanfics this is very good, but it has a lot of BS and looks stupid. I recommend you read it, but I will not continue, this story is not bad, but it does not suit me. do not judge this story too fast, it is good for those who do not care about much BS. if the author is offended, sorry, it was not my intention.
doesn't have any actual plot really but it's really fun to read. it's not boring like so many other HP fanfiction but it has room to improve tremendously. could start with more dialogue and interaction between characters (if you that do it slowly and little by little or it might become forced for you) or using original plot a little more so there be some more exciting things. Thanks for hard work.
I am surprised by the amount of good reviews for this fanfic. I read the first 3 chapters, chapter 10, and the newest chapter. It seems like a diary. There are barely character interactions and no interesting dialogue. I have nothing against wish fulfillment and harems if they make it interesting. Also an novel can be saved if it at least have a good mc and female lead. The textbook and diary format makes it very dry. Kind of like jerking to a math txbk. Introspection is good, but by itself, is just the main character living in his own head. It might get better later tho... pls dont take my criticisms seriously author. Do ur best!
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I love the idea but I think you need to push the age up a little. Harry is too young for anyone to take him seriously and where/who is his guardian before he turns 7. Maybe use a guardian as the front man till he gets old enough. Also fill in the blanks like we want to read how he caught the rat. Thanks.
Okay, I don't really get why so many people dislike the story. It is a SI wish fulfillment, but the writing quality is really good, especially compared to other novels on the site. It is an interesting read, and keeps you immersed int the story all the way. Also, if you don't like harem, then don't fucking read them, Seriously, half of the reviews on harem stories are from people who don't like harem. Read what you like, but don't just crap on something because it isn't the genre you enjoy. Also, it's harry potter, and harem, what the **** were you expecting? in the first chapters you can find the age of the characters, if it's not your thing, then same applies as before, don't read it, but don't ruin it for anyone who would enjoy it, and don't dis the author because he isn't writing a genre you enjoy. All in all it's an enjoyable story within the category of SI, but it includes everything that this type usually does, don't be surprised about the usual cliches when you read.