Deep_Sky
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Summary: the hero has a beautiful and strong sister (1 beautiful girl), she saves a beautiful and cute girl as well (2 beautiful girls), the hero saves this beautiful girl and falls in love with him, the hero dies back to the past, he has a neighbor who has a beautiful and cute girl (3 beautiful girls next to the hero) Her father has an accident and then lives with the hero in the same house as it appears that she loves him, again the hero needs a legendary stone that is bought by a beautiful girl with a strong family (4 beautiful girls) She is strong and her bodyguard, how will she give him the stone after saving her lol, but by chance the hero trusts her and often she will give him the stone because he is the hero and she will fall in love with him (stupid clichΓ©s) Then this girl finds the hero interesting and tries to delay giving him the stone and so you can expect the direction of this novel, the strange thing is that the hero Before the start of the stupid novel he doesn't have a single girl by his side but after starting the novel he will become a magnet for attracting strong, talented, wealthy girls, and the best women to his love, and that's only in 22 chapters 4 beautiful, talented, cute, intelligent girls from legendary and powerful clans.
my biggest problem with this is that it has info dump after info dump, fillers with only world building one after another. i dont mind having a novel that expands in its world design, but seriously, not even 50 chapters in, you havent even let the mc get in his mobile base, and youre focusing on world building already? this story should focus on the mc and his mobile base not on some other side characters family background and entire history as well as their ideals and revelations. not to mention there isnt even a proper frame work or general understanding in the world yet youre already sweating the small details. its so borimg and repetetive and im not even in the 50 chapter mark yet. priorities author, priorities.