ANNOUNCEMENT: For all those complaining about my updates, I would like to sincerely apologize for that. Its just that I have exams and I didn't want to get distracted. I'll begin updating again from next week. Wish me luck and Thanks for reading my novel. Also neglect my shameful act of using this to give myself five stars, lol. [Edit: Hi guys, so I'm done with my exams, for now. And have began updating again, you can check the latest chapters.] Don't forget to tell me what you think about it in the comment section, or in a review.
This novel is completely amazing, I like how the author takes time to let the plot to slowly unravel itself, it keeps you in a bit of suspense, the mother daughter relationship here is quite different from the lovey dovey scenes I'm so used to, and it makes for a completely unusual atmosphere. The relationship btw ML and FL seems to be budding, and intriguing as well, although they have not spoken to each other, it makes you wonder what's going to happen. The accident mystery concerning her sister and loss of memory also got me like... This book totally got me at the edge of my seat and I can't wait to see how it plays out. Great job author, keep it up and me updated.
The story is really progressing well, I love the way the author takes time to let the plot unravel slowly. The pace is indeed really good, and the writing quality has really improved. The plot is getting more dramatic that it'll make you want to read more. Good job author, can't wait for more updates.
The writing is actually pretty good; even though, there are still some grammar mistakes, mainly punctuation and spelling stood out to me the most. The characters aren't particularly original and are the usual male and female leads and their females--in other words, they act in expected ways such as how the ML finds the FL almost blindingly beautiful and captivating--> This wouldn't be bad if there was more build-up to this; love at first is fine but seriously cliche. Another example would be the reaction of the mother at the end of chapter 6. However, the nice upside to the characters, although I saw this more for the ML than the FL, was the introspection/their thoughts. This good for fleshing out the characters. Continue with this and their development. The story is just beginning, so I can't say much on it. The good point of difference from this story and any other romance story on Webnovel is the trauma/seizures induced at the name of the sibling to the FL. This is definitely different. Lastly, keep updating, it seems that it's been some time since you last posted at least compared to the previous frequency. Overall, good job so far!
The story doesn't immediately get you immersed into the world. Instead, it slowly introduces the characters and the plot. I wasn't too overly invested with the main character, or any character really. They were kind of bland, but the personalities are gradually developing, so I hope to see how they grow. One thing I want to point out is that, this story uses Asian names, but the world feels a bit too western. As for the writing, it isn't bad, but I feel like it's too distant from the characters. Try using a close 3rd-person POV. Imagine writing it in 1st-person, but then replace the 1st-person pronouns with 3rd-person pronouns. It's just a tip though, so don't worry about it of you don't want to use it. Overall, the story has potential. Keep up the good work!
The plot has potential however I feel that there's something lacking in the presentation. Perhaps it's really too early to give out comments because the story is still starting, but I guess at 9 chapters, the pace is a little slow? Nevertheless, as I've said it's a promising plot with lots of rooms for improvement. Emotions are a little intense with so much anger/angst from the characters. I don't know if it's intentional, though. At ch 9, significant interactions are only between characters focusing on familial discord. Quite dubious if it fits the genre, but again, it's might be too early to tell. Looking forward to more chapters, and the budding of the romance. It's on the onset already but execution is important. Good luck, author.
Since its a new budding novel I am giving 5 stars to the author for attempting to write. hang in there. Initial couple of days and chapters will be troublesome for you but hang in there. You have got a good substance and it can be clearly seen in your writing. Just work on the grammar a bit more and the rest will be dandy. Cheers !!!