Mushoku Tensei: Reincarnated as the Twin Sister of Rudeus Greyrat

This is not constructive criticism!!! Well the fanfic is great it cheers me up when I see a new chapter coming out I wonder why there are so few views and no opinions but if you want my opinion: keep going and don't stop this fanfic / thank you for all chapters released so far /

I love this story love the main character love how the mc and Rudy interact with each other

It's a rather good story, thought I was Initially offput by the MC's relationship with rudeus since it seemed like they were being set up for a romance, but it's actually something way weirder than that MC is a pretty fun character, she's like a mini-eris that know about rudeus's perv antics and berates him. Classic tsun with twintails. She's also a crazy freakish talent when it comes to MT swordsmanship, which I personally enjoy seeing in fics. ..But also, about 3/4 into the story, this actually becomes a honkai impact crossover? Like it turns out MC is hosting the Herrscher of Void and a bunch of other honkai characters pop up seemingly out of nowhere. They're all well integrated into the story of MT so it's not like the plot's been thrown out of the window and everyone needs to start fighting honkai monsters all of a sudden, but it's still pretty jarring.

Writing Quality: It's not the best and it's not the worst. It's just average. But that's fine to me since as long as a fanfic is readable it's all fine.(5/5) Story Development: The story is all over the place for me. It's fine if you want to go for something in your story, then do it and commit to it. But the story while having AU things is surprisingly following the plot. And it would have been fine to some extent but some forced plots in the end irked me very much. The story is not bad really, but I cannot call it good either. There is also the addition of SAO that I don't like, but its author's choice and it doesn't really harm the story so its fine.(3/5) Characters: Now this is where the main weakness of this fic lies. The main character is really annoying to me. Idk if either only I am annoyed by her or others are as well but personally she is really annoying. Now don't get me wrong, I don't hate her because she is female or that she isn't yuri (according to author somewhere), I don't really care about shallow stuff like that. I have enjoyed plenty of female MCs, ones with Reverse Harems too so that isn't really the problem. The first problem is that she is an enabler to Rudeus' perversions at the point of his life, where many disliked for his certain antics (including myself). The second problem is that she doesn't seem to be very firm about her decisions, and that's fine to a certain extent but you can't be a half a$$ed yandere sister and expect me to like her. Also she became cheerful a little too quickly considering her past but it's fine, but that might have been a good avenue for plot just saying. Other characters on the other hand seem fine but I don't like the reason for that. It's because the story is going for the almost canon route. And one thing that actually makes me angry is the thing with Zenith since that could easily be prevented, if you know you know. (2/5) Updating Stability: It's decent from what I understand. (4/5) World Background: This is good since it feels that all the Author's effort for the story went here. And I enjoyed how the author changed the background but that does make some room for loopholes too, but that's the weakness of the plot not the background. (5/5) Overall: This fic is average, I would say. Maybe my expectations were too high when I came to read this Mushoku Tensei fanfic. There are some better fanfics that I have already read and there are worse but that has nothing to do with this. I wouldn't really recommend this fic to my friends but if you reading this review, try first 3 to 4 chapters and if it's your cup of tea then go for it since you will only get more of that. (3.8/5) Also author don't be so defensive in the comments, if something is a genuine mistake just admit it and try to not repeat it again. Being defensive can be seen as if you are in denial of your mistakes. And if you feel that you aren't wrong at all, then just ignore those comments.

this is the most enjoyable fanfic I've seen, you perfectly capture the essence from the original work material while still making it interesting, i cannot say how much I want this fanfic to continue, but unfortunately it seems to be dropped, but soooo still worth reading

Motivation 5 Stars! Honestly, after the first chapter, I already got immersed. The words and stuff mix together well and they create a very "teenage" feeling. As if I have travelled back in time to the old school days. Great start!

Best mushoku tensei fanfic story ever. I basically like oc character and it's character development is quite interesting. Oc relationship with rudeus is also interesting to watch.

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