Reviews of Multi-Dimension Harem Adventure
Multi-Dimension Harem Adventure
LuxVonDeux
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Well. This story could be great, but in the end, it's just a harem fanfic with uninteresting main characters, a ton of cliche and easiest power struggle out of there. I liked how thoughtful you was in power description. I liked how you make use of them I liked characters for harem *. I don't like how easily he gets them. I mean make them brainwashed lovers ,and mc getting all white of how he dislike it, but still need they powers ....yeah, I cringed hard, but at least it's was glossed over fast. And then there is story itself and mc. Why he doing anything he does ? Because it's best option? Yeah, sure. That's the problem, I don't feel like mc have more in him, than just conviniet function to make good decisions. The same with his character changes*, when he introduced flames, I was already iffy. But when he reminded of sky flames...i just realized how deep the rabbit hole. Either way, story don't have much tension or interesting moments. P. S. When you go in dxd and create harem only from the girls you summoned from another world(and Valerie, I dropped it) ....what? There is no good girls in dxd?
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Overall an interesting work with one major issue. The only issue is that the Author does not know how to use tenses. In other words, the author doesn't know to add "ed" to the end of verbs describing past events, or add "s" to the end of words that are plural. Overall an issue that could easily be fixed just by pasting the story into word.
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Writing Quality: Errors are few and none are jarring enough to break immersion. Stability Of Updates: Updates occurred fairly frequently, but without a set schedule, the time between updates becoming more spread out as the story progressed. Story Development: Was fairly decent, though a little narrow. Could have used some exposition occasionally. Character Design: Fairly good, but also fairly one-dimensional due to locking people into flame stereotypes which removed any uniqueness. More development would have been nice. World Background: This was supposed to be a massive crossover world, but turned into DxD with irrelevant HP world and four chapters where Bloodbourne made a brief appearance but affected nothing where only DxD plot mattered. That being said, A lot was written about Romania which in the original series was mostly irrelevant other than the fact that Valerie and Gasper came from there. So all in all, a little good - a little bad. Overall: Fairly good, but not multi-read good. Which considering the amount of horrible writing i've seen on this site, means this is in the top 10th percentile.
