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Not a very enjoyable Story. Grammar is good. 4/5 Story Development 2/5 it's at the moment just Canon with an added MC. Character Development 2/5 The MC is basically an Emo that mentally complains about everything be it all Mighty or exercises or talking with other people. There is no real development at the moment but its not enjoyable to read with such an MC. Update Stability 4/5 World background 3/5 since it's only canon there is nothing much to rate. So all in all an okay work but nothing special and the MCs personality makes it rather difficult to enjoy.
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8 chapters in. So far so good. I got immersed in the story quickly. I love his personality. Smart and the best thing is that he doesn't care about some things at all. It is very different from every other fanfic. It is unique because the MC did not meet with Midoriya before coming to UA. The MC doesn't really hang out with Midoriya. Please don't drop this Fanfic.
Good story. The story is good until MC completely changes behavior at random (the reason is written, but the change is too big to accept). But this happens towards the end, a bad saga (the final saga) is not enough to make a story bad, since he has always entertained me. Let's say that i noticed the desire to finish everything quickly, when you could slowly change the behavior of the protagonist. Another negative thing is the "skills" that are created (always at random) from his Quirk.
It went so well untill you awakened his quirk forced plot and SPOILER GO TO NEXT WORD IF YOU DONT WANT TO KNOW he doesn't revive his mother and forces people to die because plot he already revived nine before so he could do it again The grammar is decent there are a couple mistakes every paragraph (around)
it goes downhill FOR ME when he can control everything in his "domain". FOR ME, it will be good if the mc not OP from the begining. but gradualy become powerfull and powerfull. so we can se the progress of the story and character in their daily activity. i know that it is fanfiction story. but it will be good if the story can make the reader become exited from the progres of story. thats from me!
What a banger!! I love your main character. For me that is a welcome surprise. I usually find it hard to relate to non-reincarnated male leads in 'My Hero Academia'-fanfictions. (Most likely because teenagers are more often then not quite annoying in my opinion. They are cesspools of hormones and insecurities with an incessant need to be liked. Going through puberty once was quite enough thank you very much.)
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