CherShootX
Hi there, Here I'm back with my shameless review for my own work. This novel is my second creation, I would say. So it should be better that my previous one. As usual I will still be making a Sci-Fi vs Fantasy setting. Kingdom Building will be happening later on. I know that the prologue might be a bit info dump but it was needed later on. Of course, I will still try to improve more than ever before.
After reading two chapters, I realized this is a worthwhile novel! I included it in my library to enjoy the evening reading, with a cup of tea and bagel. This is the most! So appreciated by bibliophials! Good book in the evening! Find! 5 stars! I will not write about the merits and possible mistakes. I’ll read more, add a review! In the meantime, I want to express my admiration for the author, for such an amazing book !!! Cool!!!
Here's your worst review, good job. The mc with his 160 IQ somehow managed to be a retard. The saving the little girl was so fucking cliche you might as well make him actually be a prince, better yet why not her a princess too? The way you write situation is very annoying too. Here's an example of what it feels like: "MC could run five miles." "No, actually MC could run 10 miles if he wanted to". It always sound like you're contradicting yourself jesus christ, just write it as it is.
Very Good Novel So Far"....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................."
Depois de ler dois capítulos, percebi que este é um romance que vale a pena! Incluí-o na minha biblioteca para apreciar a leitura noturna, com uma xícara de chá e pão. Este é o máximo! Tão apreciado pelos bibliófilos! Bom livro à noite! Encontrar! 5 estrelas! Não vou escrever sobre os méritos e os possíveis erros.
It like the mentality of the protagonist is of current society , he glares at a robot,he goes in a market which is exactly like our current stores,talkes about uploading consciousness but has to walk to a store and they need bot guards with plasma rifles, also the store robot has a submissive voice, more like exact ideology of current world with high technology even that technology is thought with pathetic standard ,I m only giving it 3 stars on 3 Ch if it improves I will Improve the rating.
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The story had a very good start, there were some chapters which had me worried for the development of the stories, like in first town and casual day. I wont comment on grammar as i focus more on other aspects of story. the author already laid a groundwork for a good world so he should keep in mind of that. I would remind the author not to go in the direction of know it all and clever type MC without laying groundwork to make believe. If harem or romance then should have a good development like in some love at first sight. The villains and competitors should also not be some fools and should have some character. The author should not be discouraged by some comments but rather strive to improve his quality, I believe this story has a chance for good development.
Its great so far should give it a try.............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I read this up to chapter 23. I think the author did a good job in writing this book. The quality is excellent, and the writing is neat, and everything flowed nicely. I can see that the author is a fan of sci-fi and did some homework as well. Although it's still too early to tell about the story development, so far, the story is moving on nicely. It was not too rushed or too slow. I quite enjoy reading this novel. Anyway, good luck, author.
Wow, after reading, I would definitely think that the writer was really a big fan of space novels. There were a lot of terms and jargon about space traveling, but these made it more enjoyable. It shows that the author researched his story. Overall, it was a good story. (BTW I've added it to my library)