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It has good plot and no plot holes which is nice. And also it's consistent in its world build-up. It's good with character development too. I only have a few complains: 1. Grammar needs improvement. Punctuation is important. 2. Too fast. The plot moves super fast and sometimes it's confusing. And it's even more confusing when one character has like, 3 names. That's it. besides this, it's a great read.
Tbh, I love the book. This is usually the writing style I like. But! But, that doesn't mean that other readers will like it. Lemme tell you why! First is the synopsis! You don't have too put that much info dump on the first thing your reader will read. They will immediately get bored out of it or basically ignored it. What I recommend you to do is just make it more simple and mysterious. This way, you can arouse your reader's curiosity and at the same time make it easier to understand Second is the story itself. Just like the first reason, too much info dump. This is the problem when your setting is a fantasy world. Make it shorter and descriptive as possible. Avoid repeating the same adjectives and nouns. Use their synonyms instead. Plus, grammatical errors are found including the tenses. You often mix it up probably. Lastly is the fighting scenes and other things that need in-depth explanations. Basically, you sometimes overestimate the descriptions or you are stating the obvious. Please refrain from biasing your mc. If the first sentence describes how a sword pierces the arm, you don't have to add nonsense like, the arm was bleeding. Why? The reader can picture out the bleeding part you are telling too. Instead, add some excitement to it. For example, 'His arm was pierced by a sword. And the pain inflicted in it caused his body to lose control for a split-second'. This way, you can open up a lot of possibilities in the next fighting scene. Your readers will have a hard time determining the future and the excitement will make them more attached to the book Overall, this book has potential. If you have any questions directly ask me in discord.