Kiikuro_Shichigo
If you're kind enough, please leave an honest review. Your reviews will help me improve the story. If you have any problems with my way of writing or [of] the story itself, no matter how harsh they are, please tell so - so that I can fix them. And if you have any suggestions, I won't mind following them so that I will be able to improve. [Chapter 30: REVIEW] The pace is a little slow as I prioritize (World Building) and (Character Building), especially of volume(1), where it focuses on MC - adapting to his new world. I tried to make the story a little better in the second volume, but it - of course, still has (World Building) for the knights, mages, and adventurers. And if you have read far enough up to Ch.30, you would have already realized that I mainly focus on action and comedy, character development already comes with it, and the 'slice of life' element is always in there. Easier to say, if you like this kind of genre to have a comedic blend, then I guess you would like it - but that's only my opinion, read it for yourself to find out. [Notes:] Please be considerate as I'm not really that good of a writer, which I know much for myself. Lastly, if you ever like the story, do vote and put it on your collection. Every time their number increases, it's a great feeling.
Great book but u need to work more on character discription such as facial colaur of eyes personality behaviour and can u use different coloured or different brackets for each character so asto make it easy to understand.Also I think you can add more mysterious theme, missions, a setof group of friends ,hidden treasures Friends to mcand such From -A fan of your work You can look forward to these series to get an idea for further development In another world with a smart phone.
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