DaisukiDayoSenpai
Another book from the same author who wrote Runners Survivors and the Strongest Zombie Cultivator. Author-san, you're working way too hard, you should get some rest. I don't spend any coins on your works but I always read them. Ever since you wrote Runners Survivors, I've been your fan. Thank you for publishing your third book! Hope you're doing well, author-san.
I've read until the latest chapter and this is actually pretty good! Spoilers Ahead.... The plot twist on the first test of the Lucid Dream Server was actually what I wasn't expecting and also, this book is not what I was expecting when it comes to a virtual reality novel. Also, I didn't expect that the main character is literally blind. But although he was blind, the story was not boring. You've outdone yourself, author-san! Thank you so much for your third book and congratulations on getting the contract!
I have no problem with the story quality. It is interesting for me and I can see the passion of the writer. My advice are to not overly use commas in one sentence. Maybe lessen them by making it to another sentence. I also want to suggest to change your dialogues into this "You are amazing," He said in a low voice. (if it was an active convo) but use "You are amazing." He said in a low voice. (If it is the end of convo). Well, good luck! Your novel will reach its success as I see the potential! Kudos! 👍 peace ✌️ I don't want to be critical though......Have a nice day!
What shamelessness! An author reviewing his own work? —some reader probably. Well, this may be a biased review but I hope you stick with me on this one. This book is a spirit contestant in the virtual reality section... and what better way to depict virtual reality than showing something that we humans know and have?! That's right, dreams... lucid dreams. A dream where you can bend the wills of reality and you can be whatever you want. That's what a lucid dream is. If you have experienced it, then you're one of the chosen ones! I'm kidding ahaha. I remember, the first thing I did when I had a lucid dream was master the ability of flight and remodeled the world by filling it with zombies and having a fight to the death with them. What are your lucid dream experiences? Share them in the comments and I'll gladly talk about lucid dreams with you hehe :) This book is a representation of my wish to the future. I know that games are advancing too much these days we typically already have the means to have a VRMMORPG, but accessing lucid dreams is still a far-fetched idea. However! That' what novels are for, and that's why I'm writing this book where everything can be a reality— in your lucid dreams of course. To explain the concept, here are some pointers. — Character building at the first few chapters so no catchy fight scenes yet — It may be confusing and may seem like a mishmash of genres but they all vortex to a single point in the story. In other words, everything in this book is connected so there will be no plot holes left unturned. — Backstories wouldn't be shown just yet! — And the last selling point... IT'S LUCID DREAMS! Who doesn't want that? And that's all for my shameless review. I hope you give this novel a try and I hope you enjoy your stay in the Lucid Dream Server :)
Ahh... I like that you started with a family and the protagonist being extraordinary, better than the stereotype loses. The writing was fair and easy to hook into...while the character tone looked a bit unnatural. might work on that. There's not may error I can found throughout the first six chapters, the author has worked his muscle on that. Overall it has potential, like most other vrrpg novels, though its seemed a bit different than those. Good luck Author for the sprity...
Honestly, a very well written start for a Virtual Reality story. I 100% look forward to this book. Better than 95% of the novel on webnovel just based on the first few chapters. The story has a unique MC, Side-Characters, and plot. Truly see great possiblities from this book. Just make sure to update more ;)