Lost In His Mind

I love your story so far - although there's only one chapter, it's already interesting! I like how you've built everything up to the climax, great effort! There's a few mistakes here and there but they're not too big. Keep up the good work!

Things got very real, very fast. In a good way. I like how the author uses situations and emotions to show the bonds between certain characters. Not gonna spoil anything, but it’s interesting so far. I like some of the descriptions and prose as well.