Gayu2594
Wow...!!!! Just wow...!!!! Loved ur creation author...!!!! I really enjoyed reading it..!!!! Well done...!!! One small concern..... After few chapters u hv jus swapped the mother names of both leads... Initially FL's mom name was Aruna and ML's mom name was Renuka BUT later on it was changed...!!!! This is Jus a gentle pointer...!!!!π
All right, I'm here to give you some tips after what you say in the forum. First of all, if you want to upload chapters, do so in moderation. I can see that you uploaded more than five chapters a day on average, that's not ideal to gain popularity, especially for a chance to get featured at the "Daily Updates" section. From what I have gathered, it is best to upload the first two to four chapters at once, then upload two chapters a day until it you have 15-20 chapters in. After that, just upload once everyday consistently. Based on my (and others') experience, you will have a greater chance to be featured by chapter 30 this way. Currently, this genre of realistic contemporary romance is not on trend here. You may want to switch for another genre if you want to write again in the future. It doesn't have to be CEOs, you can go for fantasy romance or magical realism too (a girl with unique power, for example). Now, let's go for the technical issues in your writing. You have a bad habit of writing in monotone, thus become "choppy": when you write a paragraph, you often start with the same word for every sentence in it. For example: She.... She.... She.... After she... While she... Even though we, as readers, can understand the story, this may be a source of irritation for many others. Another bad habit you have is writing triple question marks. Why would you do that, when one is enough? Once again, this is tiny neglect that may irritate readers. Ah, yes. Title! you need an interesting title for the chapters to keep the readers intrigued! Last but not least... Congratulations author, for completing your book. You are one of the few, if not the only one I have ever seen writing their book until the end even with few or no fans supporting you. I really applaud your commitment. If you want to seek inspiration, I do recommend you to join the inkstone discord server. You can meet me and many others, from bottom to the top ranking there. :)
Yo, you asked for a review, so here goes: 1. The biggest problem with this story is that it's not been edited. The grammar is mid-level, but it gets better as the story goes on. I suggest downloading Grammarly if you can't anyone -- it's not a perfect editor but it'll help a lot with the basic mistakes and spelling. 2. Try not to shift between first person and third person in the same sentence. For instance, in the first chapter there was 'his mom asked her some questions regarding my studies and other general stuff and she answered them politely as she can.' There are other times it happens in the story and it stands out negatively. Referring to the same sentence, keep the language precise. Use words like 'stuff' sparingly or not at all. It would be better to just enumerate directly, like 'studies, the weather, the state of the nation, the heat in Bangalore, the rice of bananas in Puerto Rico' and so on. Being more precise with language gets you more pro points, haha! It just looks more professional and reads better. 3. The draw of a romance is the push and pull between two main leads, and the ******* it causes with the surrounding characters. One way of the best and simplest methods to show ******* in a romance is DIALOGUE. Your story's too descriptive. In most cases, too descriptive means too passive. A romance can be gentle, it can be slow, it can be enduring, but definitely should not be passive. I'm not saying you should make them scream and shout at each other all the time or write a story where the characters just talk without doing something...I'd drop that kind of story like a hot pan. More dialogue between the major characters, between the main leads and secondary characters, between different secondary characters, is a way of adding more depth and ******* to the story. A romance novel is best written with 60% dialogue and 40% description. Don't ask me which book that was written in, 'cause it's been so long I don't remember, haha... 4. Is the last chapter the end? It's a rather unsatisfying end, yo... The story in general has too little *******. Try adding a little more conflict here and there. TL;DR Shore up your writing basics, get an editor, let your character's actions be your description, polish your dialogue. The writing lacks ******* but it has potential. There are more than a few guides to writing romance and fiction in general that can be downloaded. Keep on writing and don't give up! You just need more experience.
I just got to know about this story on Webnovel. At first, I wasn't interested in adding another book to my already reading stack but this seems quite interesting. I haven't read it yet but will read definitely. The arrange marriage genre is quite interesting. ANd it's been time since I haven't read any. So I will read it in my free time. The story seems short and interesting.
I will be honest i dont like romance novels at all usually its like dousing me in holy water but, yours was different. Your story was very smooth and easy to read, i had a bit of trouble stoping because for once romance was not completely boring. Your description of world and characters was great small error is your punctuations. Some words did not match the sentence like you were trying to write did but wrote do instead. Besides that is a hidden gem.
Can I just say that I love this book so much!!πππ I love the chemistry and trust that our main protagonists are building up as they get to know each other better. It's the type of story that makes you believe in love and people again. The whole story do far seems gentle and more relaxing than other romance novels that have cheating boyfriends, betrayal, ice cold CEOs, etc. Author, thank you so much for writing this book. Please continue writing and don't ever stop, even if some haters tell you to. Love, A Loyal Fanπ€
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