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This novels is really good and it starts, with the relationship between a friend who is a adult and the protagonist, Ronan, who is 11 years old and his friend is really nice. Next, the development is going in the right direction, but perhaps you can add a synopsis, to let the readers know what the novel is about! But so far, the novel is going to the right direction! And keep up the good work Author-sama! :)
Overall a very solid book, though I do have a few pointers just as recommendations for the author. First, try to write a more detailed synopsis. The current one is somewhat broad and doesn't feel interesting. Second, create a more unique cover, preferably with the book title and main character on it. Honestly, that's about it, the actual story itself is fine, and I like the concept. Keep it up, author.
Interesting so far. Took me a while to read, but it was worth it. Your writing is consistent, to the point of flawless (not that I’ve seen one so far) as it seemed that you even proofread before posting the chapters. It was a comfortable read, to be honest. Only one small advice though. Maybe dividing your big paragraphs into smaller ones, so that its easier for mobile readers to enjoy your story? I have no problems reading the story as it is since I’m using a tablet, but that may not be the same for smartphones. Aside from that, I like how the plot is progressing so far. I really don’t know why, but I thought the MC was kinda cute as a child (though he appeared quite edgy at times. Maybe I’m wrong, but that just makes the story a bit more realistic.). Please keep up the good work. All the best to you, and your future writing journey :).
The book has a lot of potential and is fast-paced. I feel bad for Roran since he is only 11 and has to survive in such a terrifying world. I do feel that you mention Roran's name too many times so why don't you try replacing his name with a 'He'. For example instead of saying 'Roran was tired. Roran decided to go to sleep' say 'He waas tired. He decidedc to go to sleep'. You get the gist. All the best!
The story is pretty well written. It's quite fast paced (maybe too fast, I guess personal preference). At 14 chapters wrote it's too soon to make a judgement about the overall quality of the worldbuilding, but it seems promising. One complaint I personally have is that the author should maybe spend a little longer on some of the scenarios. Overall a pretty good start to the novel.
I cannot say much about the stability of updates for I am a new reader I just hope the stability will stay. The character design seems a bit two dimensional but its better than nothing. The world background is good I just wish I knew more about it. The development of the story seems a bit rushed and I'd love if there was more description. Other than those concerns this story is one of the good ones.
The writing is good and the grammar is outstanding. One little issue I see with the grammar is that there are too often paragraphs that are massive in size which makes the read a bit less fun. The updates are steady, the story is solid, the characters are cool, and the world building is good. The description is better than average but I'd like to know more about what the environment and characters look like. Feel free to look at my story "Avatar: Macai's Journey" and let me now what you think.