23 Notice of rewrite

The further I get into writing the further chapters the more I realize that I made my character far to powerful far to early, In setting a baseline for my characters strength I found it increasingly hard to develop the character through struggle, and flesh out charicter flaws, I also realized that this baseline interfered with further progression due to the fact that I need guns to be lethal enough to have relevance within this worlds power system, I also eliminated the element of struggle and used the system as a lazy excuse for charicter motivation, leading to a protagonist that is far to passive in nature, rather than one driven and frustrated by his own weakness.

the novel will be rewritten with a real end goal for the protagonist (a real goal not something so flimsy as a revenge plot for the body's original owner)

my original vision for this was a simple system novel that would address some of my frustrations I had with the current state of web novels in general and plot armor

After some reflection over produced chapters I realized I had fallen into more than a few of the traps that frustrated me in the first place

many of my side characters had more going for them than the original protagonist as I developed the story

the main problem is the protagonist had no personal motivations, no outstanding flaws or strengths, lacked personality and conviction, and adjusted to the situation far to quickly. most importantly the way I introduced skills and approached training was flawed and half hearted it was far to 'cheap' for my protagonist to pick up skills

perhaps more importantly I skipped the necessary adjustment period, struggle. and most importantly fear of death

another problem was the system and its origins . I was far too lighthearted for a novel that would have been more grave from the start.

second chance novels were a favorite of mine because they forced a certain urgency upon the protagonist, the time limits imposed were my attempt at that, but I eventually realized that the short term milestones greatly limited my ability to develop characters and plot points due to the massive constraint that comes from cramming those things into a short time frame

another issue I had with this was the progression escalating far beyond what I intended and far too quickly at that mainly in the area of guns ( I skipped revolvers, breach loaded weapons and several other options that would allow me to slow down progression)

I also made magic to clear cut , a certain amount of mystery and unknown gives me far more freedoms as a writer and makes the development of a highly detailed power system less urgent

further down that path of thinking , my approach to enchantment was a mess I already hate the mc I made and know I owe my readers something better so I need to start over and do things proper