luciel_707
It's heartwarming story. But I have to be honest. Please be mindful of your grammar despite being in Tagalog language especially on the punctuation marks. Instead of using the elipses(...), please use comma and period to break the sentences. I also notice that the dialogue lines are being convey to simple dash to identify the speaker. Write it like how you see it. For example: "Nakita mo ang keychain?" tugon ni Angelo. That's all.