dancematdan
Addressed to those that are dissatisfied with how this is written or have problems with the system or other things. All I can say is sorry that you are unhappy at how some things may be poorly explained or constructed. Please remember that this is an unedited story that has not undergone any fixing or proofreading. There will always be issues that you will find. The only way I can fix this is to stop writing and go back and correct everything but that way I would end up disappointing those who have stuck around so far and still enjoy what I have wrote by missing upload deadlines. I cannot possibly satisfy every reader, especially those that cannot make it past the first half of the story and wish to drop it. I am putting out 13 chapters for two novels that are ongoing so I do not have the time to go back and rewrite it. So how about this… At some point when I have reached the end, I may open up a new version and make some corrections if there is even a strong enough following and support for it still. Again, thanks to all of you that constantly leave positive feedback and give some constructive criticism that will help me spot where I have went wrong.
One of the best One Piece fanfics I have read up to date. The characters are engaging and interesting. Character motivations are clear and believable. The world building is enriching what was there before. The WG acts in a way that feels canon and makes me hare them just that much more, which I love. The marines are portraited in a way, that makes them the "Justice" nuts they are. I love this story and can only recommend it.
i relly love this fanfic and relly want to see where we go forward negativ system honestly I think it would be better with out it and just make mc a genius learning wise and the stats confuse my brain like mc is relly likable the world dont feel like a copy of one pice that have the same exact story as one pice
I have a problem with how much this story is wasting time in Zou where nothing is actually happening. It has been 23 chapters and nothing has happened she is just training and sparring and we are getting exposition and giving info dumps of everything the author is changing in the world from the original story. I don't even care about the story anymore I just want to exposition and info dumps to stop. And i can't tell if it will get better in 20, 50, 100, or 200 chapters so I'm not going to continue reading. I really tried to give it a chance but I'm so tired of the endless info dump to have just one scene of something happening and then back to the info dump that I just can't. And yes time skipping and her saying how she trained is useless info dumping because a) it already happened and b) it wouldn't change anything if we only got (X) a mount of time latter and her statsus that the author is putting in every chapter anyway.
WQ English isn't my primary language but so I can't give an accurate review on WQ, but I don't have any problem with it SD 5 starsThe storyline is well-planned and there are many interesting arcs.CD 5 starsThe character design is perfect. The characters are shown to have logical reasoning and the mc's interactions with other characters are 👌
I like the fact that this is not a story is not some cheap fabric were they writing it for self fulfillment and also I like that the story is keep stuff grounded and there is an explanation for everything and you don't pull stuff out from nowhere but the amount of chapters released is one every week but that is also a good thing because it keep the read wanting to know what is going to happen next!
No doubt, the author can write. However the story development and character are sooo bland, its soo boring to read. Most of the time when i read facfintions i feel excited, scenes build themselves in my head but with this fanfiction even after 117 chapters everything felt soo bland. Nothing really happens, MC has several training arcs traveling from one place to another(new world-west blue-new world-noth blue-paradise-south blue). Not to forget crew is constantly divided with 2 ships. MC also recruited animals, kids 6-14 years old. In conclusion its very boring.
A story of one piece ,with a MC without devil fruit powers just feels bland...as i continued reading i skiped a lot of chapters because of info dumb..it feels like i am reading a martial arts fanfic....dude just give her a rumble rumble fruit....why are so hung up not giving your caracters devil fruits.....the story also is not engaging me enough...while reading i naturally feel like to skip some chapters...