Crook_Shank
An interesting idea so far, though he'll definitely get OP extremely quickly so it'll probably be hard to make any conflict entertaining without pulling power ups for the villains out of nowhere. It could stay interesting as a slice of life/observer type for when Naruto grows up and Kakashi just intervenes if necessary but I can't see any real future conflict. Though it is an interesting idea and I'd like to see more of it
this is pretty good my one issue with this is how honest this new kakashi is spoilers example he chases orichimoru and tells him a complete path to imortality not only is he belived hes rewarded with copiration in a root battle and get this hasirama and madra cells!!? pretty sad he wasnt scammed tbh. the second case of this was when he gave out an S class secret to a civilian. and finally when he gives his full research notes to tsunade keep in mind he disects people so he basically gave the scared of blood medic his disection notes all in hope of being thought. well he also imroves pretty fast and finally last critique there are no consequences for his actions things always go his way
Read tons of Naruto novel and yeee this 1 is good Of course there is shortcomings Sadly MC got strong way to fast(or should i say overpowered) You could build on how he got strong (show us how he struggle for power so readers care more and be more immersive) And show others people perspective on how they see MC Overall good novel TY
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Since this is a Fanfict, I would not judge the plot or MC that much since that would be a waste of time. I'll give an OK for the narrating as it is quite good even though some parts were limited from the lack of vocabulary. But the interactions of the characters are a bit... off. For instance, there are some parts where the first guy with the dialogue said "Let's go to this place" out of nowhere and the other guy listening to him was like "okay". The reactions of the supporting characters though, it's just there's not much of it. I'm trying really hard not to brand this review as a spoiler. So, if author wants to see parts I've pointed at, please go to your latest chapter's comment section.
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