southgamez
Man faz tanto tempo que votei aq que nem sabia como fazer isso mais kkkkk. Mais voltando ao assunto gostei do início da história só vim aq pq a sua fanfic acabou e vc disse que tá fazendo um romance original então vim ver eu particularmente gostei bastante da sua fanfic ent vou ver essa aq tbm boa sorte autor
Review: (slight spoiler for chapter one) I've read the first chapter and I think it was a good start to the story. There wasn't much information about the history of the world and it was kinda fast paced but I can see that you wanted to start the story quicker so it isn't a big deal. I like the fact that the sages are basically otakus that started the magic system. There's a few other unique things in the story as well. I can see that you are trying to show that there is going to be a social hierarchy in the future. The teacher has a kind of carefree personality and most of the time that foreshadows they will be someone important in the future but obviously that doesn't have to happen. So the story hasn't gone past the first chapter so I can't rate the stability of updating and the story development so I'll just keep them at 3 stars. I think this can be the start of a story I can enjoy so I hope you find inspiration to write this.