chimychimes
Just to be clear, I like the story. It kept me curious enough to follow it through for now. But there is one major issue: the writing needs a lot of improvement. I felt lost at times when I was reading. Structure needs to be fixed and that calls for improvement in Grammar. Sometimes, the writing is unnecessarily descriptive, and sometimes when it needs those descriptions for better understanding, it's just vague or doesn't exist. As for the dialogue, I get the gist of what they're trying to say, but they need changes to make them seem natural and spoken by actual people. Other than that, the story's nice. There's not much world background other than that they live in a super-powered world of some sort. The first 4 chapters that are out are alright for an introduction and I'm sure they'll be much better when the writing is improved. MC is like an angsty teen but I'm sure there's development for him, especially if it's a weak-to-strong type of story. To say it again, I like the story and will follow it for more. ( •̀ ω •́ )y
The world and the synopsis are interesting. I admit that. I've started reading the first chapter and it gives a lot of information in one chapter, it seems confusing and so hard to remember all of the character's names. The grammar and vocabulary are great but the writing needs to be in more detail for the reader to read easier. (Sorry saying this to you when my writing is worse than you, it's my honest opinion as a reader) But one most important thing, yes!! The plot is great and unique. Keep it up and give me more updates, author!!