Reviews of Inverse System
Inverse System
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MESSAGE FROM THE AUTHOR: Hey everyone, I hope you guy finds my novel enjoyable! This is my first novel, and as I say in the author's notes, there might be some problems that I'll need to iron out. Nonetheless, I'm happy to receive any comments or questions you guys may have! Anyways, I have made a map of the region for the setting of the novel, hopefully, it'll make things easier to follow! I might edit it later down the line, but for the most part, it'll stay the same! If you feel there's anything contradicting between the story and the map, please let me know so I can fix it!
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If you can get past the beginning, where some of the author's inexperiences are shown, it's actually really good. The fights are cool and characters are well written. Writing quality - I see a couple of people complaining about grammar in some other reviews, but I haven't seen any major writing error, maybe some small ones that can easily be glossed over. All in all, it's well written. Stability of Updates - no complaints here. 1 chapter per day, and a promised mass release Story development - Something happens in every arc, and the story seems to be developing smoothly. No complaints. Character Design - As I said earlier, I've been finding the side characters really enjoyable so far, which is rare in a system novel where the mc is the only star. Romance is good too, noharem as promised by the tag. World Background - Well, you can tell a lot of thought has gone into the world building before you even start reading the novel. There's an entire map of the world, and the setting of the world is portrayed well as the story continues. TLDR, the story starts to shine after the timeskip, at least in my opinion. At the end of the day, you shouldn't care about what I think. Make your own opinion
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This novel is amazing with a very unique twist on the system genre! The MC can copy other people's abilities but inverses them! And the best part is that the novel is not exclusively just elemental abilities! Anything is possible and the author truly shows his creativity in this one! Give it a read! You will 100% be hooked!
The first few chapters show a problem common to new writers; their characters all sound the same. A kid would naturally use less complex words than an adult. Someone trying to intimidate sounds the same as the one they're intimidating. Another is the use of dialog as exposition. Of course you have to have exposition in the story, but they should be written as if the dialog is being said by an actual person for an actual purpose and not just obviously for exposition. A way to migitate this is to break down large exposition dialog into readable chunks, sprinkling in descriptions of what is happening in the scene. For instance, this chunk of dialog taken word for word from the chapter: "Heh, you're sharp. Sorry about this, jobs a job. You're right though. We're not Econican soldiers. We're a group called 'Checkmate'. We were hired by a group of Orthlys nobles who'd benefit from a war. < I removed some dialog here to shorten the example >" He said as he took a cigarette out and lit it. And compare it to something like this: "Heh, you're sharp.", chuckled the boy, his child-like voice in odds with the situation. "Sorry 'bout this, but jobs a job.", he shrugs dismissively. "But you're right though, we're not Econian soldiers. We ", at this he waves his arm towards his men, all much taller than him, gesturing flamboyantly, "are 'Checkmate'. A bunch of strapping young lads hired by some Orthys nobles to cause some trouble. Heck maybe even start a war or two for their benefit.", the boy drawls, taking out a cigarette from one of his pockets and taking a lazy puff. With this description, the reader can fill in the rest of the scene. How the boy stands, perhaps mockingly, facing the main characters. How his men are just standing behind him. Maybe they are at attention, obedently waiting for orders, maybe they're standing in a loose, unorganized sprawl. Are the men eager for battle, with grins on their faces as if the main characters are the only things separating them from a large payday? As the first few chapters are right now, I will not read any further. However the writing basics, like spelling, grammar, etc, are quite fine. Which is why I'm rating this as above average, not bad for a first time writer.
I often don't like system novels, as there is a lot of bs. But, this author has incorporated it into the story very well as of this point. It's not the main focus of the novel like other system novels. This one is more focused on the over-arching story. The worldbuilding in this novel is immersive and stellar. The characters feel very real and are well written. You should definitely give this a read!
I'm only leaving this comment to say the idea seems great and fun I want to read more stories where the MC has the ability to use others powers and the Inverse seems to make it more interesting but the updates are very slow, when there's at least 500 chps or the story is done I'll read it and give a proper review until then good luck.
