Adellights
Hey, Adellights. I just want to say that your female character is written really well. Her thoughts and actions are well described. She is also humourous-that's a big plus. Your writing quality can be better, and your world could be more fleshed out. But, overall, this has potential. Sincerely, CodeW
When i read the synopsis, I felt a little confusing. Who are all those people? A more clarified way would have been better. There were grammatical errors and typos. Other than that, its a good compelling atory. I felt bad when she got betrayed by her best friend when he admitted he asked Christopher to ask her out. I would have accepted nothing less than a good grovelling. I wonder how it turns out in the end?
There are two main points I would like to highlight in this novel: 1. Valerie and Juan's relationship: I appreciate how the main character and her friend have a platonic relationship. They have been together since they were little and have a familial love for each other 2. Valerie: her character design is grounded in reality. An individual can be strong, independent, opinionated, and shy all at the same time. I appreciate how Valerie is a strong female protagonist who does not feel the need to be in a romantic relationship, but, is open to the idea of romance. She also tests the waters of romance (I have not finished the novel yet and waiting to see what happens with Valerie's love life) Keep up the good work Adellights [img=recommend]