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If the author update this constantly then this story would be one of the best hp fanfics of all time. There are only 4 chapters at this point but the story has amazing potential. As writing quality, narration, mc's personality are excellent. I'm just hope that author doesn't drop this too soon. Ps. Good work author.
Bored out of your mind and just strolling rankings or the Recently Updated section? STOP what you're doing and go read this fanfic!! Long chapters? Check System? Check Mc transmigrated with knowledge of the plot and isn't stupid? Check Will he follow canon? We're not there yet but sure hope not OP? Check We aren't at the plot so I can't say anything about how the mc will affect the story, but the start is interesting and it caught my attention.
It was great at start TBH but after first year everything falls apart, Second year is completely skipped by author whole second year is wrapped in 4-5 chapters and Mc just stops improving his stats saying he is already powerful and voldy is still not a problem yet. His start of third year his ML and points are barely any different from his first year stats. I get that Author made him a bit too op in first year but to not improve in second year at all just to nerf him is just not done.
Well, although it was interesting, there were too many disappointments so I can't really force myself to keep reading. There were too many cliches, a couple of cringe moments and a mc that just seems to be unable to stay out of trouble even though he himself was the one who said to keep a low profile and grow in power first. So yeah, although I think this novel deserves a better rating than this, these ratings represent my disappoint over this novel
W. Q.: The most lacking part of the novel so far. It has a lot of grammatical errors and makes reading quite difficult at times. Not the worst, as a single edit could fix most of it, but yeah. S. o. U.: Almost daily apart from when the Author has his own issues. S. D.: Progressing nicely along. Still in the first year of Hogwarts but there's a lot more to explore. C. D.: The character so far is very likeable. He has brains and makes use of any exploit he can find. W. B.: What can I say, I love HP Keep up the good work.
I don't typically review a story till a fanfic reaches around 30 chapters, however this one changed my mine. Despite all the childish and poorly written fanfics out there that gets five stars when its really nothing but a pile of garbage, this one is not it. The author actually puts thought and consequences to actions. While the mc is strong he is not op. There are drawbacks to the powers and has a lot of potential. My only hope is that the author expands further into the world of Harry Potter past the school years. Most rarely ever explore the world.
I'm dropping this story due to my character, let me explain. generally speaking I dislike MCs (or ppl in general) that devalue themselves."I'm an idiot" etc are examples for this. let me give you a piece of life advice. If a person is bullied, ask yourself: what makes them the bullied person instead of someone else? What are people's intention when they act in certain ways? The answers usually come with experience in life yet one has to start asking the correct questions in order to keep bettering themselves. Life often is hardship and only by acknowleding that you are doing something wrong you can better yourself. The missing depth of Character shows that you don't yet know about the coherency in human behavior. An example I'd give you is that the MC "works hard" to improve themselves, yet doesnt have enough self-respect and toughness to be a person that's willing to through the process of doing things they don't like doing.(discipline). He is like a feather in the wind with no goals aside from "better stats in magic" and just keeps floating wherever the wind may take him. Humans like that tend to be lazy (if they can) and stop moving forward in face of hardships. Therefore they'd stop bettering themselves at an acceptable level. This is just a generalization but I hope you get the point and keep improving.