Reviews of Imperial Nanny Ying Yue
Imperial Nanny Ying Yue
Dominique1412
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Hello my lovely readers! I've never done this before. This is my first time reviewing my own novel. First of, I've given myself five stars. For many of you, Imperial Nanny Ying Yue is my third novel on Webnovel but it's the first novel I've ever written. I took a lot of time thinking about the plot and the world building. Anyway as the synopsis says, the story relates the story of Prince Li Wei, a deaf-mute kid, Emperor Li Jun, a devastated emperor who stopped living after the disappearance of his wife, and Ying Yue, a nanny employed to take care of Prince Li Wei. The story will revolve around those three protagonist and their way to happiness. The female lead isn't like your common female protagonist who tolerates being step down by others. This female protagonist is strong, independent who values relationships above all else. She does justice her own way. I won't say anything more than this. The story isn't perfect as is the author herself. The story may have flaws, but this is part of the journey as an author. If this is the kind of story you're looking for, do gave it a try!!!
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The premise of this story is wonderful as well as the idea behind it. Perhaps it's just me but for some reason the writing comes off awkwardly. For example 'he asked interrogatingly' or 'he said assertively'. You use phrases like that consistently. If a question is asked usually it's automatically in an interrogative tone since an interrogation is just an official year for the questioning that the police do. Basically, it becomes a bit redundant in that aspect. There are also other things you can use to describe besides those adverbs. For instance instead of saying 'he said assertively', a phrase like he stated in a tone that made it clear he was serious. It's longer but it fits in and provides imagery. I am honestly not trying to Lecture of put you down because I think it's amazing to pursue your goals and consistently put in effort. It's just that I personally believe that I'd be doing an injustice by not saying anything because I truly like the premise of the book. It is a skillful blend of both modern and ancient to me.
So yeah. Pretty bad review. First point is, although the "child nanny become the wife and mother" is common, the idea on an imperial nanny is good. So at first I was quite happy. An ancient China where there could be an imperial nanny ? Sounds interesting. But it is a modern world with an imperial family ? Wtf. Now an enthusiastic FL that want to take care of children, good, uncommon. Talented as a detective, well every FL need a cheat, so it's OK. But damn her personality is horrible. She meet the first 'enemy', and insult her and slap her directly. She is barely better than a low class bitchy villainess. I mean, respect to a stranger, even if they are rude, is basic etiquette and courtesy ! Now, ML is a jerk. He never met his son, for 5 years ! Because the boy remind him of the mother ! He is basically saying : "booohooohoooo, the love of my life is dead, I don't want to be reminder if heeerr". If I could, I would slap him and yell at him to get himself together. He is an *****, an emperor, and a father. He has no excuse to say in the past. He has responsabilitΓ©s and should uphold them. Also, he is a pathetic mess of misery and self pity. I know, novel world, Γ placΓ© where life shattering live exist, but smh, one of the most important human, abilities is to forget. And lastly, this world. OK, Γ royal family still in power is a modern world, can pass, good enough. But a harem? Seriously? In which non Islamic country is a harem even socially acceptible? Which lead us to another problem. There is basically no social structure. I tried, but can't see one. Oh, and lastly, it isn't that well written. Author has been lazy by directly writing the name of the speaker, and the place the action take place. Most of the writings are dialogues. It look like a manga script. If you read this, author, those infos (speaker name, character background and else) should be either integrated in the text like : "okay", god said. "let us create the world". Here, you know who is speaking. Also, you can use decorated structure, that add to your world and make the book better. Instead of saying 'Blabla mansion, FL room : *insert dialogue*', you should say : "within the blabla mansion, the lights of FL room where still on. Inside the room, the young girl was *insert whatever*' Anyway, sorry that this review may affect book ratings, but good luck on improving
The books doesnβt have one set writing style and is rather choppy in terms of flow. The word choice and storyline is poor, and the characters lack personality. Even if someone were to be strong and opinionated, there should be a bit of common sense. If the emperor was being abused, that wouldβve been an instant death or sentence, imperial concubines have more status than commoners, she hadnβt officially taken the position as imperial nanny but acted as if she was all thatβ¦??? She barged into the throne room but there was no announcement from the eunuch. The world background is confusing because the book is set in imperial times with concubines and the likes, yet has traces of modern influences such as; busses, women getting βdiplomasβ, and modernized wording. There is no build up for each character, no story, and no personality. you know a book is good if you get lost in the world created by the author, I feel like I havenβt been able to step into the world and immerse myself.
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This book is good. The characters are awesome. however the author repeats the end of the chapter and begins the same at the beginning of the chapter. The author also tends to repeat the term when the person talks a specific way in a specific type of tone. another problem is names don't always need to be stated in a sentence, if you follow along you know it's that person. Other than these minor problems the story is great the plot is good. I really like the characters too.
I haven't read it yet, only the synopsis. What caught my eye is the "lots of slapping part," who doesn't like a lot of slapping? The other point is the female lead is strong, OK good Tag. The best is she is a nanny and it's a harem.. Not reverse sadly but harem none the less! Authour ill save it and read it. I hope you continue with your work and I will add another review as I start reading. Good luck with your work!
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