Reviews of Immaculate Spirit
Immaculate Spirit
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A hidden gem, a genius teenager and an average man that was trained to be a badass and lived his life serving his country as an agent, fused together to become an even bigger badass. He wants to be known by his knowledge and intelligence but his life started to revolve around showbiz. He doesn't have a system nor cheat that would help him be famous straight up (i.e given acting skills / singing skills), he also didn't go back in time to steal other's works. But with the fused genius and badass agent's abilities, he could push through any obstacles. This is very much worthy of 5 star imo, but I'll leave it with 4.5, there are minor spelling mistakes or mistakenly using homonyms, but that could be easily fixed by simple editing. The author also did great by staying away from most clichés. It stays unique. And you wouldn't be grinding your teeth from reading almost the same sh*t over and over despite reading different books.
super well written novel. I enjoyed reading it until he got to college ....and thats when the plot got kinda strange... however my advice to the author is to make the main character more consistent (which would improve the progression of the plot significantly). Your MC dabbles in too many things and then abandons them, and he is a little too perfect. Plus there are some major plotholes pushing the plot just to show off the MC's perfect skills and Gary-Stuness. Take the time to develop his decision making and the thinking that goes into his actions. After reading for awhile i found the MC behaving like a drastically different person every chapter as if he has a split personality disorder. Please to slow down and justify the MC's actions, things happen too fast and for no reason other than his justice-boner. Let the MC enjoy his newfound freedom, I don't understand why you would make him basically return to his old profession when he has limitless potential. Overall this is down to a matter of taste, but to other readers i really do recommend you read this novel as it is significantly better than most novels you find on this site and has plot elements for everyone.
To be honest I almost dropped this in the beginning as the grammar was quite grating but I kept reading which I am now glad for as the story got better and after getting some editing help I could enjoy the story much more. Light hearted feel good story with dashes of action and intrigue. Stay up all night reading it all in one go ☺ definitely recommend a read!
I have truly been looking for a novel like this. A novel with a genius protagonist set in a modern world with minimal supernatural events involved. The writing quality is excellent, the stability of updates is alright, though I would rather have a chapter a day than 2 chapters every 2 days, the story development has been splendid so far as well, the character design is nice and the world is to my liking. All in all, very good. Please do continue writing.
welp the review i gave is just. till chap 11 after the boy wakes up and **** he has the ability to learn anything and do the impossible possible and some other **** yet i cant seem to find marc at all it like there is only 1 soul in the body and not 2 even tho marc got into teh body it like the boy killed him or smth the subject of marc isnt even touched upon but it should be if marc himself is in the damn synopsis. anyways what my problem is that this has a pretty **** grammar quality but it readable. it has ****ty character design for the kid acts like an ***** even tho he was inside his own body for 5 years or smth but he doesnt seem affected at all and it not normal he doesnt seem to have any psychological side effects even after he was inside his body still functioning but couldn't talk, if i put the best cookie u ever ate in front of you and then starve you for years how would you think ? anyways basic psychology is a NEIN. World background ?.... well we know he is pampered by gey mothers and has a grandma who loves him even tho she never say him. and he loves them even tho he never saw them, as his moms his grandparents are rich too. yeh imo the only thing till chap 11 is just that he is rich and cant even seem to find the slightest bit of fear that he might have a hard life. if he has not hardships he can never learn truly nor experience ****. story development.... ohh wait that exists here ? i thought the whole story was about the kid being a superhuman who can do anything if he desires nothing interesting here 0-0. updates are very good. all in all if the guy would learn from his mistakes and create a new novel he would best start small and then make it big and he shouldnt be focused on filler till at least he has 30 to 40 chaps cuz u gotta make the main story a priority not how much the mc is so badass and he has the IQ of 1000. Buildungs roman. if u ever heard of that term learn it. anyways hope next time the author will make a better first impressions cuz this was truly a disappointment.
This could easily be in the top 20 on this site if it had an editor. The plot is well formed, as far as I have read, and the characters are interesting. Still, English is obviously not the first language of the author. There are a significant amount of extremely common mistakes such as using the wrong words, getting plurals wrong, incorrect sentence structures, missing words, missing commas, run on sentences, incorrect tense, etc... It also doesn't help that the cover implies some sort of multiple personality story and synopsis doesn't really explain anything. Overall this is a good read assuming you can ignore the quality of the prose itself.
This novel is so underrated. The start was rough but not enough to make readers leave even though there is some wording mistake that is very big. This novel looks like Jay Aslan but had a different feels and pace. If the start was smooth i bet it'll top the shadow of the genre.. If you're a reader who enjoys fics like Jay Aslan, Logan Williams, Choice System and Juvenile Entertainer then this is a very big hidden gem for you. Don't let the sypnosis fool you!
