Reviews of I Will Conquer The World!
I Will Conquer The World!
DemonsDescent
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(Please note that I am currently around chapter 15 and this is not a review of the full story) Maybe I'm being too harsh by comparing this to work by published authors, but I feel like the author really needs to work on worldbuilding and prose. Firstly is worldbuilding. The premise of a reincarnator entering a new world is undoubtely intruiging. However, it's nothing special and has been done many times over. the world does not feel special either, mainly existing as a backdrop on a painting done quite sloppily. Many people don't realize how interesting a fantasy would could be. Their culture, religion, and technology could be fascinating in more ways than one. Whenever the author falls back on tropes such as isolated fiefdoms, corrupt church and incompotent absolute monarchs, it takes away much from the story. Secondly and perhaps more importantly is prose. Characters react to events in an understandable manner, but their interactions seem rather bland. Take the farmer, for instance, who simply blames our MC for all his problems at the beginning of the story. While this may be realistic to some degree, his voice seems bland, existing for the sole purpose of loathing the MC before loving him later on. Our MC doesn't use probing methods to gain an understanding of said farmer's thought process either. Neither did he draw logical conclusions based on the context of his situation. Instead, we are simply infodumped on the farmer's thoughts in a very abrupt and uninteresting manner. I'm not sure if you've heard this once or a million times, but I think you need to work on showing the individual character's thoughts through their choice of action and diction instead of simply telling us "X thinks Y because of Z". In real life situations we typically don't explain our thought processes in such a manner and doing so in a story disengages readers such as myself. Instead of telling us that the farmer is angry, maybe show us him being hostile without apparent reason before we finally gain an understanding after multiple failed attempts to probe about what's wrong. It's not a requirement to create a layered personality in every side character like George RR Martin, but I believe you should at least make your characters seem realistic and understandable. Overall, I would recommend writing lessons and lectures such as Brandon Sanderson's on worldbuilding and plot. Additionally, there are multiple online sources on prose, voice, and character interactions that I would reccomend the author to look into. I will admit that my standards are quite high and maybe unreasonable, but I just can't give this story a higher rating when it seems like a discount version of "Little Tyrant doesn't want to meet a Bad End."
I deleted my previous review and skipped ahead to around chapter 20, I can’t say that I’ve liked it more but it’s certainly more entertaining than the first section. At around chapter 20, the kingdom is more developed and the plot doesnt center around mc showing off his little “inventions,” but rather a more action oriented plot which made up for the slight jumps in logic. If anyone wants to read, I suggest that you start by chapter 20 + because you dont really lose any part of the plot or information. I can see that the author is working very hard to take in everyone’s opinions to satisfy his reader base so I truly believe that the novel will improve in later chapters or his/her second book. Happy reading!
The writing quality is superb. There's little to no mistakes and the update so far is good at least 2-3 chapters a day. However, i didnt like the approach of the author on the chapter entitled "Assassination". Just directly assasainating his father and others. And theres that chapter 30 onwards. I mean killing there and this i thought the mission of the MC is world peace. Why kill? I can understand with the spy and greedy thing because others are coveting what yours but isnt it too cruel. It progess way tooooooo much too. Theres almost no explanation how the process or how he got this and that. Its way too fast. Theres little information at all. Thats all. My bad author but i wont be reading this anymore. I'll try someday maybe but until then, goodluck.
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