SovereignKlord
Imma be honest here, i find it sasuke acting like a good gentleman.... It just doesn't fit for me, and honestly, making him become sakura's boyfriend. Just absolute garbage. Now i dont like to hate, and im not saying your story is garbage, im just saying, that this kind of fan fic doesn't fit with me. I mean, amny others may like the idea, but for me, i don't...sorry if this makes you want to quit writing, but i say u shouldn't, like i said, im not one to hate, im just saying this story could have been much better, but, u do u, if u keep going, one day for sure, u will be able to accomplish something.
I absolutely love this novel from the harem aspect (although Iβd like it toned down a few notches and not get every girl that is beautiful) the rights although fast are nice, and the chat and multi world system with quests and the ability to give powers to it so others can buy which make its awesome
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I have three main issues with this novel. First of all, the group chat. It's the main focus for most of the novel, but it isn't very well implemented, and the plot would be much better if it was omitted entirely. On a similar note, the MC's goal is very unappealing. Just a generic, I want myself and everyone I know to be happy. It's fairly unique for this genre, but it makes for a remarkably boring read. Finally, the pairing. Sasuke's relationship with Sakura is boring. Just walking around going on dates, as Sasuke demonstrates his superiority, and Sakura cries about her insecurities. It's not great.
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