KaiokenGuy
I'll be straight up 100 with you I did not read this novel. I'm giving this a 5 out of 5 rating oh, you want to know why I'll explain. Writing quality? Don't care I didn't read it, yet. Story development? You ham sandwich this is about Krillin you can only make his story better as the strongest human of the DBZ universe. Character development? You flippy Flopper do you not know this is Krillin it's time for him to shine with all his bald Glory! World development? It has Krillin in it but the best development there is. Stable updating? Time is beauty time is perfection there's no need to rush with Krillin π©π
so dissapointing ... i just cant help but get annoyed on this because i want the mc have his own adventure not just follow and watch the story .. him being with goku every chapter is just annoying . butterfly effects sometimes is unreasonable dont just power up everyone because mc is there he doesnt even do anything to power up them. and hes like a kind of person that will do anything just to help people . he can kill himself just to help people haixt.waste of time,, wondering why so many people give this 5 stars
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I came to see the strongest human krillin, i only saw someone trying to be a sayian without saying the word. At this point, shouldn't you just makke a sayian story ?........................................................................................................................................
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Meh. It's just mediocre at best. If you came looking for something original, no luck here. If you've watched DBZ Abridged, then you already know all of the jokes present. As one reviewer said before, MC is a guy trying to be Saiyan without saying the word. What made dbz interesting to watch is hype before and during the fight, to won't see it here, as mc is almost always stronger (good irl, but not here)
Get creative with the wishes. Ask for suggestions if you can. Involving the readers is always a good plan so as to maintain yourself at the level you are at. Also, slow down on updates a bit if you want. Stockpile chapters a lot. Make excuses for taking breaks- exams, not well, travelling, etc. and stockpile chapters. About the core novel itself, there isn't much I'd like to say. There is hardly anything to 'improve' and only stuff you can add. Your novel's pace is perfect. Not fast and not too slow either. Vegeta and Nappa haven't even arrived yet I never felt your novel is going slow. I can see you're building pillars to support your castle(novel) later; you're doing solid groundwork for smooth transition of your novel through each Arc. Just don't forget one essential thing. The 'Butterfly Effect'. Let MC face some unexpected, non-canon, challenging situations just like Cooler and that demon thing. Good luck for your story. May the Force be with you.