Newmasterknife
The story idea (MC with a system) is pretty good, although it develops slow and fast. Let me explain, the chapters are somewhat short and there seem to be abrupt time jumps without arguments. In general it is a fanfic with potential but there is a critical flaw, the quality of the writing. The style and form can be improved to be much more comprehensible and fluid, otherwise good work, I hope it is not abandoned.
synopsis seems interesting but after reading 2 and a half chapters I realised it's a pointless read reasons, 1 first 2 chapters are reca** 2 it was Tony that said not to change the past to prevent his daughter from ceasing to exist even if he dies he would consider it worth it knowing she lives 3 it be a better story without a system just Tony's wealth and intellect 4 since he would be from the future he can recruit future avengers/ defenders/ those who would be loyal to him 5 since he is in past he could also learn mystic arts, he would already have great level of knowledge in various fields this way he has a few years worth of prospective learning time 6 can make further enhancment upon his suits
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