confused4you
It's not that the story is bad. The problem lies in the fact that there are no facts. The first 2 chapters are a whole lot of PLOT ARMOR. He needs money? Hey, there is someone running a dice game and he just happens to be carrying around 50K pounds for MC to win it... how convenient! Honestly, the whole thing hit me with a sense of disbelief. I believe the guy isn't dead but in a coma where he is having this unreal dream. If that is true, my rating should be higher but if not... this needs a redo. Funny enough, the grammar isn't that bad, just a few misspelled and wrong word choices here and there.
I have read other work from the author and it is very unique amongst other Fan-fic and I like it but there are some grammatical errors here and there but nothing major. The story progresses a bit fast and the character growth is a bit slow I hope that the Author could squeeze in more chapters. And could flesh out the character more.
I've read a lot of HP fanfics. But this one has got all the things which others lacked. The ML is OP with bloodline, but has to work hard regarding magic and all. The relationships are really good, well can't expect more when the ML is just 12-13. The Harem is also coming along smoothly. I suggest this novel to people who like HP and also like romance.
honestly terrible. writing quality: 1 its horrendous. wrong words are used constantly. grammar and punctuation are also terrible. author shortens names to things like prof, voldy, ect. and it feels like ur reading a draft. story development: way to fast paced, there's nothing entertaining just plot. but terrible plot. incredibly unrealistic. its like a 5 year old got sudden inspiration and had to jot all his ideas down as fast as possible. character design: conservation is bland and boring, the characters are like robots without emotion. its like they try to micic humans but fail. I'd not be surprised if a lizard wrote this.