R_F_T_S
First of all, I’m going to point out that this story is around 70% action and 30% mystery. If you’re looking for action-packed scenes and descriptive fights, then this story’s for you. Other than that, I love the world-building you did in the beginning and as the story continues. The plot is eventful and interesting, but it feels like a lot of the mystery is already spoiled since it tells you who the bad guy is (but idk there might be more to the story that hadn’t been revealed yet). The supernatural abilities are placed well in the combat, though it might be nice to see them used outside of fights. The characters have nice interactions and there is a strong female lead, but you could give them clearer and more distinct personalities. The major issue is probably that you should work on your punctuation, sentencing, and paragraphing. Your word choice is great but there’s a lot you can improve. But overall, I love where the story’s going and I can’t wait for more!
Overall I'll say it's a really good book, top notch characters, uhhhhh, not so shabby character design, and piece of the art world building,dan howbeit quite similar to most protagonist is one of the few main characters that actually seeks vengeance but doesn't let go of basic morality, illara isn't a pushover and actually stands out unlike most female leads, and sai isn't the dumn jock boyfriend, all in all I think it's a great story.👍👍
In all honesty I didn't read enough chapters to give this kind of score. But I've got to say this novel has a lot of potential, there are a few grammar mistakes here and there but at the same time every novel that you will read will have these small grammar mistakes so it's alright. the author makes sure to update this novel frequently giving us a lot of chapters. as a said before I didn't read enough chapters yet, so I don't know if the story development is good or not, but at the first couple of chapters the story does progress in a nice and easy way helping the reader understand a bit about the history of the characters but not revealing too much. the character Design is very good as all of main characters in the beginning are described well and are talked about in an interesting manner. the world background is also very good at the first chapters from ancient times to current time. I'm going to continue reading this and give a better review with better details - I believe that if you have free time you should read this, the story is already very interesting in the first chapters. author-nim please keep up with the good work!
OMG! 😭😭😭 THIS AMAZING! The crime fighting romantic duo, dead parents avenger metal dude, corrupt politicians and police force, nice power scaling and PERFECT transitions of scene as well as the EUPHORIC description of (fight and flirt) scenes. My two fav scenes were the fight club battle (SO GOOD! 😭🙌) and the when llara teased lover boy into making him go back on his promise about no *** (I started blushing) Llara is best girl without a doubt!!🙄💅🥵💕 Author-sama congrats on 100k viewers keep up the AMAZINGLY GREAT work (I'm on chap 13 btw🤪 I'm loving so much) To anyone who is reading this review.... PLEASE!! Give this a read or at least at it to collections. 🙏🙏🙏 If it helps. you can use this app's audio feature to listen to the story while you do something else and still enjoy how great this novel is 😃👍🥰🥰🤩
@R_F_T_S Going through your book, I remembered I have once reviewed it before. But it wouldn't hurt to review again. You have used a technique which is beautiful especially when you are describing the fighting scenes. What can I say, I admire your bold step in writting a book even out of your own culture. This Signaled to me that you have really done a lot of research to come up with this great work.
Naisu! Naisu! Naisu! I'd say these three words only buh this is a review sooo I wuv this novel! Everything's great! Characters, plot and all. Heck, those fight scenes keep me tied to it. 👀 Who knows, I may borrow your writing style. Welll, novel's great and I'm sticking with it! Keep up the good work author XD
This a lightning fast, engaging action piece of a novel. While the writing is at times clumsy. With its grammar misha** and far too wordy lines. It's fun to read regardless. Characters are interesting despite how fast the story around them moves. Which in turn leads to not losing anytime with the storytelling. Props to the author writing this, will keep reading for sure.
Overall, a fast-paced action story that unwinds rather quickly around the few key characters. The actions and combat are adequately portrayed, but the structure of paragraphs with intertwining dialogues and action could be a little more spaced out, giving each individual piece of content some room to breathe. The story transitions from scene to scene like a tv show, shifting in tone, story beats, atmosphere swiftly, though the exposition at times can be a little heavy. A story with a lot of potential, and with time, the rough edges could be trimmed off, revealing the true gem behind it.