Harry Potter and the darkness

The basic setup of the story is fine but the writing is too clumsy for it to be a good yarn. Much of the dialogue is an infodump between two characters when it should be engaging conversation. The wrong words are frequently used. You can usually tell what the author meant to say by context, but it's jarring. The story needs an edit to rid itself of all the vocabulary fails and then several more edits to made it more polished and less clumsy.

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The song the best Harry Potter stories I've read so far I love the storytelling the main character progression of the story how to character interact with everything I can't wait to see where it's going

Hey you who is reading this review. I want to tell you this novel is like a highly addictive drug. Please read at your own risk i am just advising you read at your own risk. As for the author do you know what is killing this here the precious piece of literature you have written is called killing A fabulous job man This story has the most unique plot I have ever read in any fanfiction. The mc is serious about what he is doing and definitely not a retard who is just overpowered

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Not a bad read worth the time to read it!!!!!!!! Good job!!!!!!!Not a bad read worth the time to read it!!!!!!!! Good job!!!!!!!Not a bad read worth the time to read it!!!!!!!! Good job!!!!!!!

One of the best Potter fan-fics I've come across. Evil protagonist just makes it better :D Regular updates too. Character interactions between mc and others can be quite amusing as well

i realy recomend this novel, the story is well build and the character is kind of a bastard but in a good way...........................................

Great twist on the harry potter and supernatural world with an evil MC who does what he want so cant wait for more as it keeps you wanting more

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Overall it is a good story and great Characterand lots of suspens in the story. The author have done a good job and have great knowledge to attract reader's

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This HP novel is unique in its own way, and its kind of exciting to not know where exactly this story would be headed to. Keep up the good work.

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