Reviews of Harry Potter and Deathfalls ( Hiatus )

Only good thing about this one is that the author regularly updates his story. But the story is riddled with problems, having read all chapters to date I know nearly nothing about the character, their abilities and goals or intentions. The author routinely (every single chapter) skips swathes of time with what feels like an assumption that the reader understands what is going on. Character design is one dimensional as is the story development for the reasons given. The author hasn't really added much if anything to the world background (Harry Potter with unknown drop-in character). Tried to give it a go as I assumed this is the author's first work, but there has been no improvement; dropping :(

There is no actual bad fanfic, each author and fan has their own fix that they want to write and dream in, takes a lot of courage and time. Shoutout to author of this fanfic, doing a good job. I lied earlier, there is bad fanfic’s aka stories dropped by authors who don’t believe in themselves and their stories anymore, of course there are also reason to why good novels and fanfics are dropped too. May we all take a moment to remember and although hard and painful, leave those good memories of reading them behind us 😢

The grammar is horrible needs a proofreader @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@######################################÷###÷#÷#######################################

Sad you stopped. Hope you will find your inspiration and continue it🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃

what a trash novel its made of summary that you cant get what truly happen example chapter 8 mc enter hogwarts chapter 9 mc celebrating christmas chapter 11 the year has ended, see its a trash novel

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litle bit of gramar and development problem but i`m going to give you 5 because i`m really liking it please continue to write. i see a lot o peaple complaining but your history is actually pretty cool i love the oc characters and i hope to see more of them.

Things wrong with the story. - grammar (really needs a proofreader) - the story itself (details missing and goes too fast) - character (chose a house and says that he would make schemes and yet hasn't made one) How to fix. Restart the story and edit the chapters

Unreadable thanks to grammar and authors understanding of english language. Honestly i have read better english from grade schoolers and the biggest tragedy is that nowdays there is software to correct this all..... I would recommend author to chech grammarly.com.

The novel is easy going with a good plot and no harem and no Hermione as a lover which is pretty good for me no clichè love lines or mature content for children yet i give this 5 star for that the only problem is that this needs an editor typos/ misspelling and incoherent sentences sometimes lots of potential and great expectations for this one

That one of the best fan-fic that i read until now.@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@

This story have a huge potential so support this story ı only read first 8 charter but ı know if this novel continue very long and this quality this novel is going to be very popular

translation is terrible, clearly mtl translation. other than that i dont really care to find out. when the translator isnt even bothered to do basic edits its obviously not worth anyones time.

the Grammer is terrible and is so choppy i can hardly read it, 🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞🍞

I have to admit that the grammar is bad, but in my opinion, I find the story intriguing. This may change later on, but the story's still nice.

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Its soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo. AWESOME

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