Well, I won't actually judge your grammar because my grammar sucks too, you know. I don't really have any advise regarding grammar except using Grammarly. Well, go back to the topic, you had me at the first chapter, LOL! I didn't expected that It would turn out that way. The MC is a little pervert but who cares!? Meliodas and Jiraiya are perverts but they were loved by the audience! Well, I think world background is a bit lacking. Explore the world background more. Overall, this novel is refreshing read. It has a nice plot too.
Umm, this is pretty different from what I would usually expect in a novel. I was shocked by the end of chapter 1. Like, that is not something you might usually find. It took me for a spin and I enjoyed it. Though the chapters are short, I feel like the author may write them longer as he gains experience.
I like the story so far! Although he seems like he could be a little perverted, I like the fact that he's making boys too and is interested in improving himself. Keep up the good work!
Love it💙💙💙💙💙💙💙💙 Please update daily and don't drop it between. The story is nice. Continue your hard work.
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