Sitouo
So. Im sorry to give this book such a rating, but heres why: 1. It is very rushed and quick, the mc could destroy an entire world in a few hundred words. Something like that could deserve more detail and words, it could also make the book better. 2. because of my first point, the world and character development suffers a bit, you dont get to know the enemies so well, and the mc could use some more introduction at the beginning. 3. the chapters are to short. the chaoters are always about 600-700 words. its not that big of a problem, but a bit longer wouldnt damage the book. 4. The story. I cant tell you how much i like the idea and the base of the story, but because of the points i made and some smaller mistakes, it isnt used to its full potential. Now at the end i want to say, i havent read the book in its entiry and it may change in the chapters i have yet to read. i can also understand the โmistakesโ, writing a book isnt that easy. Still, great work author!
Writing quality is good. The update stability is pretty good. The story is developing and progressing at a reasonable pace and the character design is relatively ok except the mc goes insane on small things. The world background is great because it sucks you in and makes you feel as though you're there in the midst of all the action and world-building that takes place throughout the story. So overall its a pretty good novel as of the latest chapter.
Your idea certainly hits me in the right spot, but after continuously pushing myself to read until it got better, I dropped it. The novel idea is good, but has no development at all, the MC used 4 hours to turn an entire village into vampires, understandable, but there could have been more detail in it, even the interaction with that village elder lasted one second, might as well have not even shown it, and also, after that, how is everyone fine with that, being turned into a vampire against their will, there wasn't even any confusion after it happened its like everyone just accepted it. Also, you didn't even explain anything about the castle, all you said was it looked magnificent, floats, has a lots of rooms, and has windows. Then the final turning point was when he said get ready for war or something, there was literally no checking on the army, no checking what they were invading, no details about the army conditions, and a lot more stuff. I know this story is probably just the author writing the stuff they want to write, and this could have been a fun read despite everything listed above if there was actually development in the story. Your story has potential though, keep working hard.
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๊ ธ ๊ช๊ช ๊ชป๊ซ๊ซ ๊ซแฅฯ ๊ชฎแ ป ๊ช๊ช แ ป๊ ธ๊ชแง๊ซแฅ . แญ๊ซแฅ๊ช๊ชฎ๊ช๊ซ๊ชถ ๊ ธแฆ ๊ช๊ช แฅ๊ชฎแฆ๊ช, ๊ช๊ชแฆ ๊ซแฅฯ ๊ ธแฆ ๊ช๊ช แฅ๊ชถ๊ชฎ๊ชฎแฆ. ๊ ธ ๊ซ๊ช๊ช๊ซ แฅดแฅ ๊ซ๊ช๊ชป๊ซแฆ ๊ชฎ๊ช๊ซแฅ ๊ช ๊ชป๊ซ๊ชฎ๊ชแฆ๊ช๊ชแฆ ๊ชแฆ๊ซ๊ชถ๊ซแฆแฆ แฅ ๊ซ๊ช๊ ธ๊ซแญแฆ. ๊ซ๊ช๊ช๊ซ แญ๊ ธ๊ชป๊ซแฆ๊ชป๊ชฎ๊ชฎแฆ ฯ๊ช๊ ธ๊ช ๊ชป๊ชฎ แฅดแฅ ๊ซ๊ช๊ชป๊ซ ๊ช๊ช๊ช๊ช แฅ ๊ซ๊ช๊ ธ๊ซแญแฆ. ๊ช๊ซ๊ชป, ๊ชป๊ซ๊ชฎแฆ๊ซ แฅ ๊ซ๊ช๊ ธ๊ซแญแฆ แญ๊ ธ๊ชถ๊ชถ ๊ช๊ซ๊ช๊ซแฅ ๊ซ๊ชฎ๊ชถแฆ ๊ช๊ช๊ช๊ชป๊ซ๊ ธ๊ชแง. แฆ๊ชฎ, ๊ชแฆ ๊ ธ ฯแฅ ๊ช๊ช...... ๊ช๊ช๊ชถ๊ ธ๊ช๊ ธ๊ชป๊ซแฆ ๊ซแฅฯ แญ๊ชฎแฅ แแฆ!!!
keep it up, and don't or else i'll hang you up and open a discord so we can help you out with ideas to get this novel somewhere. ............................................................................................. mm............................................................................................................................
Great work author! I mean the novel is interesting. In my perspective, I love the character's design, A strong protagonist huh, well, it's perfect for my taste. Grammar is good, you are quite explicit in the details, and ya, I like it! That's all I can say, for now, keep up the good work author! I'll be stay tuned for the next chapter.