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Theme of the story is good but it's not very well executed. Everyone in the novel, main character including are like npc characters. they talk like npc and act like npc. everyone also Don't say "I am" or "my name is" but say "Myself (name)" many things are explained as the story continues but there are some things that should've been told in the first 3 chapters. also as mc's thoughts are shown, his thoughts are like how a child thinks. he came back in time. his mind should be an adult's mind so he should also think like an adult. mc doesn't know many basic things in the world.. or it is written as and then right after his thoughts or acts say he doesn't know a thing there is a paragraph that says he knows it from his past life but doesn't show it.. dude if his thoughts are written they should itself show that he knows
The world is built-up pretty well, you can see that the author has put some thought into establishing it. I have to be honest the characters feel rushed and we only get a few lines from each of them, his parents, sister and teacher, author you have a good world but you need to work on those characters a bit more and give us more dept to them. If the characters are fixed I am certain that we will get a book worth picking up everyday for a few minutes. Good luck author keep it up
gonna be honest here, this basiclly a copy of a returners magic should be special (like the exact copy) but with a diffrent mc and forced scenes. mc gets op to fast so authorlegit just nerfed him LOL making him slack on his training and nurture other people instead of himself. i give it a 7/10 webnovel stars meaning 3/10 normal novel
The progression of the story is fantastic and the book gets better and better. A very interesting book that combines knowledge and magic, fun with lots of good fight scenes as Arturo learns to use his mana and levels up. I loved the descriptions of magic powers, clases, the world of the author and his characters. Fantastic book!
First thing first, I like the plot and I'm obsessed... The inside chapters is kinda informative like how magic or powers work. Overall there are mistakes, if I'll be honest, there are mistakes, like typo's that can be fix using grammarly. But the story is amazing, I love the whole level up character and disciple thing, it kinda shine the story, keep up!
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