Ayaka_Scarlett
The collection of short stories had a lot of variety. I just wished the chapters were longer and more focused not just on the verbal exchange but also on nonverbal cues to understand a character better. Do take the time to go over the chapters again --it's easier to catch errors with fresh eyes. Asking someone to help you out would also be great :)
Never thought a story could also be well written in parts... I really liked it so far (chap 7)... Those little things that matter... This was the only phrase I could think to describe this lovely novel or should I say this amazingly written bunch of stories. Keep it up author. Keep giving us some break from those long and too deep novels.
Each story is unique and has a kind of interesting vibe to it. However, at least proofread a chapter before publishing it. Some conversations are a bit forced and it was a bit painful to read it. The character design needs work, put in a few paragraphs as to why that particular character answered 'that way'. Let's take chapter 1 as an example, where the boy was asking his mother what he forgot today. When the mother answered, the boy was suddenly disappointed, what? Tell us why he was disappointed. Indeed, there are some times where the author purposely leaves out detail and throws it up to the reader's imagination. BUT, that scenario wasn't really appropriate for that. Was the boy disappointed because his mother forgot to curse the f*ck out of his soul that day? Obviously no, but you get the idea. Also, try to recognize and clear out those obvious grammar mistakes. It will take some time though. Ignore the low rating, it is actually a pretty good rating in my case. Keep writing.
This is, literally, a collection of short stories or one-shots. This is the first time I've come across such a compilation and the concept is nice. However, I found that each story was a bit too short for my own personal taste. It's as if, once it seems to have developed a bit, it ends. Again, I stress: this is my own personal taste. There's basically nothing really wrong with the stories (the concepts are good). If you're the type that likes really short stories, then this is the one for you. I wish you all the best, Author! °˖✧◝(⁰▿⁰)◜✧˖°