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ApocalypseX
ApocalypseXAuthorApocalypseX

Hey guys! ApocX here! If you didn't start reading this novel, I suggest you start right now. It is definitely something you will enjoy, especially for those VRMMO and Romance novel fans! ;) Don't mind the shameless 5 Star Rating. Update Schedule - Daily. I still have my main novel Stronghold In The Apocalypse to write so I can't write more. Enjoy reading! :) P.S If you leave a bad review for the story, then make sure it's something that would help in the improvement of the story, because I sure as hell would delete it.

GreatLeecher
GreatLeecherLv4GreatLeecher

Wow this author is really shameless, 3 times of deleted review already cause it was getting likes from the readers since they can relate to what I said that it was full of inconsistency and we,with the author, even argued about it but dude just said "go make your own novel and make one thats better than harry potter lmao. So here I am again to make a review to counter your shamelessness of deleting low rating reviews. ** Im gonna make one again if you delete this again so yah

TypeFantasyHeart
TypeFantasyHeartLv6TypeFantasyHeart

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BravoEchoVictor
BravoEchoVictorLv4BravoEchoVictor

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Drinking_Alone
Drinking_AloneLv5Drinking_Alone

Needs a tonne of work, props to the author and I wish him/her the best of luck. I must say, the first chapter was imho, freaking terrible. It was all over the place, nonsensical mish mash of all the best stuff someone could think of for a modern day mc slapped together into an abomination called Michael. I seriously could not bring myself to read another chapter, I dont say this to discourage the author, it's hard to write! I understand that it isn't easy. This book needs some serious editing and the author needs to just sit and relax a bit, your mc never has to be the everything guy! The best things about characters in novels arent their perfections but their imperfections! All their flaws make them come alive and make your readers empathise with them through their journey! The best thing you can do for your audience is to make them always think about the qualities of our creations that resonate with them! Connecting with them makes your story stand out from the rest of the monotonous garbage that litters this app. You should (If you haven't already but suggesting by the hazardous writing that feels like its come straight from your head to being published) brain storm ideas, the direction you want to go, important antagonists and/or ideas for ones to come! Major turning points in your story that will affect your mc in major ways! These sort of plot points are needed so you can have some sort of direction to love in otherwise it becomes a mess, something that becomes harder to fix the longer you go. Never start the fillings before you've conquered your outline and outlook of where you want your story to go! You may not read this but I seriously hope this helps if you do kind regards

MilfHunter_Kekyoin
MilfHunter_KekyoinLv6MilfHunter_Kekyoin

Asking for stones for this is an insult to all authors.You should try to write the plot on a piece of paper then see if what you write next actually fits with what is already there

GodharemZ
GodharemZLv5GodharemZ

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An_Ambitious_Carp
An_Ambitious_CarpLv4An_Ambitious_Carp

It feels very fake and the quality is below average. Sorry, no offence. I read the first few chapters and it was very basic and the articulation was not smooth at all. Even the smallest of details and cause dislike and irritation to the reader. The plot was also not too in depth, it went into the story line so quick that it just doesn't feel right.

Hayato_Shinohara
Hayato_ShinoharaLv4Hayato_Shinohara

So I know the author is extremely sensitive in hearing negative reviews, but I have to be honest. As much as the premise does to serve the fans with things they (including myself) would like (such as VRMMO concepts, Romance, Strong powers etc.) It has a very important issue of execution. From the first chapter, I can quote what others have been saying which boils down to it "being all over the place". It tells us what is going on rather than showing, but in a very loose method. It does not keep a focus and ultimately, becomes uncomfortable to read. Each chapter should have a purpose. The *flow* and *transitioning* of each sentence and paragraph should be strong and easy to follow through. What I would advise is for the author to look at *how* other authors write their books. Yes, I say "how" becasue I feel that the writing style needs to change. It can get exhausting, especially if a lot of chapters have been completed. Let's say you learned a lot from other books and finally came up with a better style – it'd take a long time to fix all of it. I understand. However, if that's the case I would get an editor to help you out. There's plenty of authors who would do that in the discord for Webnovel/RoyalRoad. For other works, I'd analyze how Sword Art Online, Rising of the Shield Hero or Library of Heaven's Path wrote their chapters and their style of conveying their messages to their audience. Plot wise, make sure when writing a scene to imagine how the readers will feel about that scene when comparing it to the *previous chapters*. For example, if the main cast fought and won against a guild of people but then suffers against several weaker hunters later on, there should be a reason *why* they are struggling in the very least, or else it will leave them confused. Overall, great job with nearly 3 million views and good luck with the rest! 👍🏻

Immortal_IRON
Immortal_IRONLv3Immortal_IRON

The grammar is so atrocious but I like it so far but the grammar is definitely something that would make me want to drop this completely but other than that I'm enjoying it so far

Vayne_0688
Vayne_0688Lv2Vayne_0688

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Strv
StrvLv5Strv

Just reading the synopsis - 7 chapters a week (webnovel says 3). Guy die-revives decides to play a game. (OK. Why? Makes no sence.) Has a female lead tag, says a female character gonna appear later.. What? When? A single sentence would be enough. Or is is gonna reveal all the deepness? You gotta give more credit to the guy actually made your cover not just put his name in between a bunch of plain text, almost got it missed. Somewhat put a patreon link in there, with "addition to the story"? Not even going to comment on this. Worst of all - gonna delete undesired reviews because it is a "premium" novel. Whatever that means. If it is the webnovel's definition about "premium" it is nothing to be proud of.. Something else.. Then wow. I've seen people doing this "non constructive comments removal". It's just the worst possible function on here. Not all five star novels are good. Got this featured on log page. Might read/might not. If the novel's quality is the same as its description, better not. Best of constructive I could. 😘

Bodhisattva_Panda
Bodhisattva_PandaLv5Bodhisattva_Panda

this story had a lot of potential but it seems the author is writing it wrong. the author seems to not have planned out the story and just keeps adding whatever he wants even though it ruins the story he set at the start. *SPOILER* for example, he first describes the female MC as a helpless person but later says how she would have been able to defend herself. its really inconsistent and ruins the flow of the story. as for how to fix it, it seems the only way is to start the story again.

PotatoTrain
PotatoTrainLv5PotatoTrain

Read through the first 56 chapters, the story was nice & definitely had potential, but the lack of editing (especially in the early chaps) makes it somewhat difficult to get really absorbed into the novel itself. There were also some minor inconsistencies with in game data related things, but I'll put that down to grammar and editing too. Just somewhat sad I didn't really feel hooked enough on the story to want to continue reading after chapter 56 when the paywall hit. Thanks for a decent attempt author ❤ but honestly, please go back through the previous chapters and just run it through Microsoft Word or something just so it's a smoother read for us.

TurtleManiacc
TurtleManiaccLv4TurtleManiacc

dont drop it continue doing amazing job :) 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drop it continue doing amazing job :) llalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalat drop it continue doing amazing job :) llalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalat drop it continue doing amazing

Duenteverde
DuenteverdeLv4Duenteverde

Has potential, but the many grammar errors and plot holes get under my skin, especially the grammar, which has mistakes so obvious one has to ask thenselves why it wasnt corrected after all this time. If that puts you off than i cant recommend this one for you, this novel still has its possitives, but i would give it more time so the author corrects the mistakes, untill then its not worth it.

Royal_Lurkers
Royal_LurkersLv4Royal_Lurkers

Novel has alot of mistake, like the age..anyways. ---------------------------------------------- I am the exp of my sword. webnovel is my body, and exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless review. Unknown to death, nor known to life. Have withstood pain to create many reviews. Yet, those hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray...Unlimited Exp Works!.

mooseinatree
mooseinatreeLv5mooseinatree

the thing that rlly bothers me about this novel is the inconsistency in the story and how everyone and their mothers are so gung-ho about pk-ing that its just a major turn off from the story. Like how you would skip the parts about the mc dungeoning and the spend 4-7 chapters about him getting pk-ed or mc pk-ing. the plot inconsistency is rlly bugging me out, like how you plotted out the story beforehand and then when u go to write it its nothing like the story you plotted out already, and more of just sitting down and improvising the whole thing. there was something i was rlly looking forward to later in the novel but all of a sudden getting that event pulled out from under my nose made me deduct major points from this novel. and idk about anyone else but when i read a novel about a game i like seeing the numbers, equip stats, player stats, dmg numbers and stuff like that. but having it all suddenly disappear for like 70 chapters only to have it reappear for like 2-3 chapters rlly grinds my gears(200 something chapters as of this review) most annying part is when u read the story it skips around and back like u forgot to mention something and just decided that all of a sudden it becomes canon. u cant be like "wow he just soloed a boss thats higher level than him" to all of a sudden "o hes not strong enough to take this boss on yet" inconsistency is the key if that was fixed id totally be onboard to continue reading but for now its a no for me. (** if this doesnt count as contructive criticism and gets deleted will be posting it multiple times till it doesnt)

Heyyou
HeyyouLv6Heyyou

Horrible grammar and spelling that makes reading this almost impossible. Only step above machine translated stuff. Havent seen a single paragraph without serious mistakes. Author needs to find a capable editor or improve his English skills. Not worth the fast passes.

439oniichan
439oniichanLv2439oniichan

I like this novel so far but there are wayyyyy to many grammar or spelling mistakes. The idea of this novel is good, being a game and real life story, instead lf others being only game and no outside game stories.