Darkswan
the story progressed fine at first, then it became a sorrowful pity party of unfulfilled threats and failed urgency that has the slow burn of a middle school fight. I like the story but I have read at least 8 chapters of petty squabbling, abuse, pointless fevers, and situations that could have been better if more communication and trust was shown instead of naivety.
I like story so far, keep going πππππππππππππππ€πππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€ A beautiful novel! An amazing love story of star-crossed lovers! β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€β€
I was drawn into the novel from the first chapter but the more chapters I read, the less exciting it became and I feel it was because you paid too much attention to the background information as compared to character interaction and developments but it's a great write up nonetheless. Keep the good work up π€