Miss_Justice
Ahh hello~~ Moshi-moshi author-nim here!! — just kidding I ain't an Japanese (=.=) I just wanted to say that thanks for “supporting and reading” this novel, at least I still have a remaining motivational excuse to work on this novel. Oh also I almost forgot. Update is on every [Sunday]. Sorry because I changed it; that's the only day that I ain't busy. Don't worry it won't just be one-chaps, probably two or more— I think. Tehee!! (=.=)
An interesting twist to the Isekai genre that refreshingly avoids certain cliches and tropes. It does have a similar pattern to the newer edgy Isekai where the MC is ostracized by his classmates as a weakling before getting stronger but cleverly avoids the traps regarding this trope by actually spending time fleshing out the characters and the storyline. Bits of mystery, such as his father or the inner self of Rein who claims to be his darkness despite appearing as light, also keeps the reader entertained. My only gripe about this novel is the large amount of grammatical errors. Maybe it's cause I'm an author myself, or that I love English, but I can't keep reading the novel without pausing to correct grammatical errors (sincere apologies author, I left so many corrections as paragraph sentences) and I choose to reflect this in my review score. As an author myself, the best proof reader is Grammarly, an app and program that can detect grammar errors and suggest corrections and I would highly recommend the author to use it.
Okay so, lemme give an honest review. Let's get to the good sides first. The synopsis itself was wayyyy interesting and it indeed got everybody's attention. The starting chapters are real heavy that you could literally feel the presence of the characters' emotions there as I read it. The word choice is great and I can imagine the events and enjoy the reading experience. And as what the others said, this is not a typical fantasy story one can read. Although I just noticed some flaws in terms of grammar (but it's okay we improve by practicing a lot and I also have grammar issues as well), proper punctuation, sentence structures and capitalization (if you're using a mobile phone while writing a novel, it's highly understandable because you know, those auto-correct and auto caps stuff). I suggest you use thesaurus to at least expand your vocabulary as well, legit it helps me a lot and I hope it will help you too. All in all, I find it really interesting to read and I hope to see more of your works. Don't give up on writing, just keep on expressing yourself! I highly suggest you read others' works as well because it'll be a big contribution to your writing journey. Congrats on your book, and good luck!
I love the plot, it grabs my attention. Nothing much to criticize about since there are only a few grammar mistakes and can be easily fixed through proofreading. the characters were described vividly and so I was able to imagine how they'd look like in a few paragraphs or so. Well, the world-building is great, I can say. I find everything intriguing. Also, the dialogues seem normal, not forced or weird which is great if you'd ask me.