Allen_Clay012
Good read, and good story by the author. What i want to point out is the intriguing storyline, the backstory and lore seems interesting and also the worldbuilding. One thing that can be improved is the writing style, specially the exchange of dialogues between the characters. There are also some grammar mistakes, but they're so minimal that they don't affect the overall reading experience. Overall, the story is great and has lot of potential. Will definetely keep this to my list as I wait for more chapters to be published.
I will say that I am very interested in the worldbuilding of the story. It's probably the most intriguing aspect of it. I do think the dialogues could be better and delivered more smoothly. That said, there is big potential for the story to be way better than it is now. I have faith that the author can improve this series and make it peak. Good luck!
A few minor errors here in there mostly when it comes to tenses and sentence structures. Nothing that can't be corrected easily though. I do admire the originality of the plot and I encourage author-san to dive deeper into the storyline and surprise me even more. It can be a bit confusing to understand the world at first but it gets clearer later on, due to author-san's efficient descriptions.
This story has been revised so old reviews are now deleted for relevance. I rated this as high as five stars because of the effort I made in writing this story. Overall there may be changes that will be made in the future. So far I liked this version of the story better. Please read and post your reviews and feedback. I greatly appreciate if you do! Thank you!