Reviews of Doomed from the Beginning
Doomed from the Beginning
Black Water
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Loved the starting ! And quite an interesting development! The quality is nice !and the genre fantasy has always been my favorite! So i will suggest anyone who loves fantasies, should give this a read!
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In the first 5 chapters, the story seems fast pace, especially that continous names of the characters and the places that feels pop out of no where, but in the next one, you will much understand the story. The characters and the story, very unique, at first you won't understand them but if you tried to decipher them you will actually like them. The continuous character name confused me at first, but the emotion in the character is really vibrant... the way the author makes it is very unique on its own, and a bit mysterious. If you gonna read it, make sure to continue in Chapter 6 and above before letting this one go, it's worth the read...
You have a gripping plot. I am not that interested in fantasy but I had some exceptions and yours gets in the list. The dialogue delivery that persists throughout the story is simple and yet being its main objective - to convey what the character is trying to say. I think you have succeeded in having eyes- friendly (Yeah I just made that up XD) dialogue structures. I also observe that you haven’t extensively given attention to detail that would otherwise spoil the story if you had mishandled it. I think simplicity of detail really suits your story. It’s just what I feel... if you wish to be the descriptive JRR Tolkien, then I have no objections. It’s your story after all. I think you have also taken care of grammar and stuff and I really appreciate you using different dialogue tags (it kinda kept me active during the reading and again it comes to simplicity in descriptiveness) Overall, very nicely written!
