Dc as a demon bet!

The idea is different I guess. But after that theirs nothing good about it. By far some of the worst grammar I've ever seen. I tried to read it but I couldn't after the 3rd chp.

I can't say much the grammar lacks a lot of work the plot is loose and empty it has many gaps and there are parts that cannot even be readI can't say much the grammar lacks a lot of work the plot is loose and empty it has many gaps and there are parts that cannot even be read The idea is fine but it lacks a lot of development so far I read it and nothing caught my attention

the grammar is absolutely atrocious, apparently this guy is from 🇺🇸 but when reading its worse than mtl and he writes like a non native speaker.

tras wrting cant read also how ur girlfreind bully u mans a beta male cmon now but good if u cant read whatever that THING called a fanfic is

Nothing is consistent and there are elements that appear out of nowhere.---------......-.-.-.-.-..-.-.-.-.-..-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-