BlackCarapace
You got an interesting plot right here, a pity that your grammar is far from perfect. Let me guess, english isn't your first language? I can tell that you give your all to make the story flow even with your limitation here. In fact, I have a certain sense of familiarity from your writing style, ah yes, I used to write like this too. Consider running a grammar checker as you write, it will help a lot on your improvement. The "god fragments" mentioned in chapter 2 kind of came out of nowhere; it lacked necessary "build-up" for the new terms to come out, is it better this way? Think of it. If it was me, I would use a subjective term such as "releasing a hidden power in him, the power of the Wind God!" in the second chapter, then will begin explaining the fragments in the later chapter instead. Come find me again if you think you have improved your grammar and syntax. I may support you further by then. For now, good luck on your journey.
Overall pretty good. The story has a lot of potential. The dialogue is done pretty well. Itâs still pretty early in the story to give a thorough review so Iâll probably update this after more chapters are out. Right now my only problem is the grammar, but for a non-English native speaker itâs not bad. A tip for the author would be to decide on a tense, past or present, and to stick with it. I always find present tense more difficult but Iâm a native speaker so Iâm not sure what itâs like from another perspective. If youâre going with past tense than never use âisâ and âareâ outside of dialogue and direct thoughts, instead use âwasâ and âwereâ. If youâre ever unsure on the past tense of a word than donât be afraid to take the time to look it up. I find that usually quality is better even if it slows down the writing speed a bit. Present tense is a little more complex because there are times where you would use words like âwasâ and âwereâ outside of dialogue and direct thought. Itâs still early in the series so you can experiment a little with past tense and present tense but eventually try and pick one and donât change it.
I'll be honest. I haven't read much fantasy here in Webnovel. I've mostly read Western Fantasy Novels. Damn, I'm Wreaking Havoc reads like a game fantasy novel. The first two chapters felt more like a prologue than real ones. There are only three chapters so it's hard to judge the plot yet. The first chapter has info dumps but it gives the reader an impression that the author has thought a lot about the background of the story and the characters which is a good sign. The grammar could be improved more. The third chapter is far better and following that, I'm sure the author will improve as well. I liked the three characters as well as how they have their own specific powers. Good luck with your work! Keep writing!
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Honest Review Seems I came a little late and it looks like the author might've dropped it. The Good: Who doesn't love time travel? (Probably some people, but I personally do!) The author does a good job portraying the action without forcing you to stop and think about it. The Bad: I don't know if this was translated from another language, but it reads like it is. The first few chapters feel like a prologue, not necessarily a bad thing, but most people prefer just a single chapter prologue. (That is just my opinion though) Lastly, the author seems to have given up on it, which makes me sad but it is understandable.