MoonChasingSun
English is clearly competent enough, that grammatical errors are just not acceptable. No excuses honestly. Your level of English is good enough to write a novel but is also bad enough to make the novel frustrating to read. Clearly, an attempt was made, but there are just too many sentences that simply don't work, as well as words that are just wrong. This feels rushed, for whatever reason... You should spend more of your time revising your drafts before you post them. Also, what the hell is up with the names? It's like you cobbled together a bunch of words at random, making some uncomprehensible abominations. Seriously, REVISE, EDIT, REFINE. Overall it's just not appealing or worthwhile to struggle through rn. If you care about your work, that's great. If not, then why are you writing?