PilgrimJagger
I’m really liking this novel so far, the power system is quite good, and the supercomputer brain AI is a nice take, however the constant change of POV is the only downfall… the back and forth between MC and the military is really jarring, and I end up skipping most of the military chapters because there’s no incentive to care what’s happening to these irrelevant side characters. I’ll keep reading in hopes it gets better as I’m only on chapter 200
Writing quality is above average, story development is predictable and there was some plothole probably to rewrite, character design is meh because not choosing intelligence since this world INT also equal to IQ, supposedly slowed down enemy movement and increased thought process to do multiple spells at once... but dexterity...makes him have faster thought process which is illogical...the stat to real life application is bad... if MC become genius because INT is high then i might quit.
The story is good. The only problem is that the MC is really really really really unlikable. He’s dumb, arrogant, he has an extremely short fuse, he is not creative, he is not brave (though not specially cowardly) and half the character development goes something like this: “Uh, I didn’t blow up over some trash talk, I grew up as a person.” 5min later… tries to start a fistfight and insults a dozen people over one disrespectful comment. And finally in one of the last chapters he goes all “woe is me” mixed with a “me against the world” mentality and goes all edgy, though idk if it was another temper tantrum or if he is like this now. Sorry had to vent.
Brain Crystal Power Strengthening (Allows the gaining of the energy attribute points) does it add energy attributes if he consume brain crystals or consume the DNA of a thaid?? also how do people in that world become stronger? by consuming pills or something? or they just level up as they grow up? it's kinda confusing and the story is super slow.. his system is not use at its maximum.. like he can just go to the library and copy important knowledge or let the system dig in the internet information of anything that can make him stronger
a lot of minor spelling mistakes but it dosent ruin the story at all i really enjoyed reading this story though i did have a lot of questions like if the system is A scientific AI then where is it getting the exp from and why dosent it give the mc and unlimited amount basically i just wanted a answer and i wih the mc abused his system more he can download any information from the internet in his head should've already downloaded every martial art and science book he could and monster encyclopedia so he could know their weaknesses as well and he can learn human pressure points their so much potential that he's wasting but i really did enjoy this story i recommend every to try to read up to chapter 40
Firstly, awesome book cover, I loved it from the very minute I saw it ^^ Secondly, the writing quality was absolutely marvelous and it made it even more fun to read the novel~ The MC's character is quite interesting so fantastic job Author! I can't wait to see the upcoming chapters! [img=recommend][img=update]
While the story is interesting and the premise is good, it has very little editing which makes it difficult to read. Additionally, while the author does take feedback, which is easy to notice after reading 200+ chapters, the older chapter are a mess and require significant rewrite. Essentially, while there is definitely improvement in the writing style, there are very few people that will be able to reach that point before giving up, which is the main reason this story will never see the top lists. For example, the other switches between story-lines between several chapters and you lose focus on their main character, while being forced to focus on characters the readers just aren't able to connect with because they disappear within a few chapter and have very little connection to the main story. While it was fixed, it still remains as a part of the story and is very difficult to gloss over. The only advise I can give to the author a complete rewrite for the first 200 chapters with serious editing and removal of filler chapters.
Hello Author, The grammar quality is good enough to read without issue but the problem is when people are in conversation no emotions conveyed at many or almost all chapters like for example if Eric speaks or his friends speaks they just say like amber said-----eric said------bro please write the emotion by which they are speaking like if they smiling while speaking or indifferently or coldly oe sadly like anything bro please just add the emotion just because of this i had to drop this 3 times then again continue after sometimes of there are any improvements.please author do improve it.Yours loyal reader.