Reviews of Awakening of the Ancient: Rise of the Fallen
Awakening of the Ancient: Rise of the Fallen
Demonic_angel
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I didn't even read this novel but I gave 5 star reviews because of my craze for Rise of Demon God. Please don't concentrate on other novels and give your 100% on writing the 1st novel. I am eagerly waiting for your chapters everyday so do try posting atleast 2 chapters a day for Rise of Demon God. Do not stop posting. All the best. Just post continuously we will make your novel best in the ranking with our power stones and best reviews.
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I've already read "Rise of the Demon God", and I saw that you wrote more novels. I gave it a shot and it was good! I'd like to say that the description is somewhat confusing. It indeed gave information about the novel, but not the way it should've done. It seems rather forced, and as I said, confusing.
There are quite a few issues with this story. First and foremost is how absolutely slowly it moves. By chapter 20, the story has barely even begun, and it took about 11 chapters to reach what should have essentially been the first. This feels like a result of you going into extreme detail about backstory and world building before even giving the reader a chance to care about your characters. These are things that should have been introduced gradually, and less forcefully, as the story progressed, not all at once at the beginning. You also have a tendency to over explain things a lot. This not only takes up 200+% more words than you need to, it gets very tiring to read. The grammar is okay, but not great. You use "!!!!" and "???" and chatroom-like syntax, and it makes your story come off as if written by an overly excited teenage girl (which may be the case, I don't know). Your dialogue tends to be heavy eye-roll material as you often use it for exposition, making your characters come off as robotic and unrealistic. Backstory should not be forced into dialogue. It kills a story. And you've done that /a lot/ in yours, and right from the start as well. You've got a few interesting ideas and some potential, but the way you write seriously needs an overhaul. Spend a little time reading better written works, see how they do things and try to reach where you are at Ch20 in 2-4 chapters instead. Good luck.
After years of study on literature and novels in general, I have finally had a revelation. Cultivation novels are retard magnets that try to forcefully make the reader feel smarter. I have read so many comments, in cultivation novels specifically, that make me want to bash my head into a wall that I can no longer not say this. Wait a minute What if I'm mistaken? You see, most cultivation novels have a certain tag next to it: Harem. That's it! Harem novels are the true retard magnets! That's why ever fanfic harem novel I've ever read has made me want to puke my guts out! I can see clearly now!
Chinese novel that contain chinese cultivation keep saying that there are Gods and Demon but the Gods doesn't have authority or title according to their power and what type of God he or she is. The God and Demon are basically cultivator instead pf a actual God or Demon. Just like novel that contain the Prehistoric. There is Jade Emperor and his gods and they call themselves God but they are just cultivator instead of an actual God. Can someone please tell me why they are call God even though they are basically just Cultivator.
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