MissCosmos
This is my initial review to show my support for the author until the story is completed. Keep up the great work, and may you see the rightful end with a renewed soul and purpose in life. You rock! I'm hoping you could also help me with my beloved work, WAR GROUNDS (all caps please. The original version got bugged) by dropping an initial review. Cheers!
I just love how well-written this novel is with it's properly paced passages and the writing style that's just amply descriptive. It's a story that the readers can easily immerse in. The incorporation of actual science facts, albeit not highly specific, makes this story the good sci-fi that it already is. The post-apocalyptic vibe didn't really stand out. I just felt like it was happening in the modern world. Perhaps, I didn't harken some elements that would indicate that it was in that setting if not for the description that most of the establishments were destroyed. Although, there are just times when the placing of events are confusing, by virtue of Alecia slowly recovering her memories. To me, Evie is a perfect recreation of a human by science. If she didn't say that she was a robot, I won't notice it at all since her dialogues are utterly humanistic. (but where is evie!) I somehow love Aven and Leah's interactions, being the considerate sibling pair that they are. I just want to applaud Wallace, Virgil, Diana, and Elica for being the kindhearted people that they are, taking in a stranger into their own home. As a preference of mine, I would've opted for Alecia to be a tad in disarray after she came out of the vita chamber. She was in that capsule for a long time after all. I wanted to see her adjust slowly in the world that she woke up to. I can't quite get a grasp on her character, sadly. Aside from being apprehensive, there are no other prominent traits of her that I descried, making her a bit boring for me as a character. Withal, even though she isn't totally human, it's interesting that humanistic emotions prevailed in her reasoning. There were barely any misha** in the grammar, and that's fantastic in itself. Just watch out for some mistakes in capitalizations. Also, the formatting for the paragraphs in all of the chapters should dovetail. You might want to edit some of your chapters. Your writing style is very illustrative and you are able to narrate the story in a way that displays Alecia's anxiety. Still, the action scenes lack the ******* of an altercation a bit. Overall, I'm really curious about the involvement of this Doctor Yards. Alena dear, you're a really good writer and this novel deserves more love. I will continue to support you! (Sorry for this supbar review, please don't hate me)
This is a well-written work with dystopia feels that adds to its charisma. The author draws the reader in with the mystery and I especially liked the first chapter then the development from there. The amnesia added with the mystery. I also liked that there's a POV for the aliens (are they called aliens? Haha). I'm looking forward for more! Good work author! đđđ